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My awakened soul seeking anew the mystery of things - A Sonnet
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My awakened soul seeking anew the mystery of things - A Sonnet |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Beweeping the state of things to come when day ends In stupor when I do lie in fulsome emptiness profound With mind and restless soul draped in sorrows liniments Watching the movements complete the inevitable round And comes into the emptiness a hint of a whisper of voice Deftly, gently, intruding like a needle into sanguine flesh Demanding, insistent, opening new avenues of choice A singing of angel's whispers appearing this stone to bless And hope awakens to lift sorrow's cloak a little while And flickers in the darkness some mysterious light And invisibly a wispy manifestation of innocent guile Opens little windows of sunshine tantalisingly bright Then does soar into the firmament on gossamer wings My awakened soul seeking anew the mystery of things < !signature--> [This message has been edited by demoninlove (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
Excellent... Excellent.. Excellent. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Opening new avenues of choice..love that verse, this was wonderful work here, I really liked it!!!! |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
I wouldn't know a sonnet from a hole in my sock. But I loved this. it is like a meditation just reading it, so calming... Allan  I just love that word 'beweeping' so much... |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Deepak....just excellent as usual! Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. -William Wordsworth- |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
And hope awakens to lift sorrow's cloak a little while--- I love that line--- beautiful image... Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Thankee Kindly All, And to Allan - this sonnet is in the form (line endings rhyming) abab cdcd efef gg i.e the first verse has two phonetic endings alternating - viz a and b The second verse has c and d (but phonetically different from the a and b of the first verse The third accordingly had e and f differing from a b c or d of the first two verses And the last two lines gg match - but differ from the first 3 verses. The entire sonnet has 14 lines. In fact there are many different structures for sonnets - as I have seen. Deepak |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Excellent as usual, Deepak. Hardrock |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
This is an excellent example of a Shakespearean sonnet. You, sir, have studied! While I could ne'er write a sonnet e'en though my life did depend upon't, after eight years of Renaissance festivals I can understand the lingo. Well done indeed! Sing while you may -The Prophet Qa'sepel Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen -The Prophet Qa'sepel |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
Very well written! It put me at a loss for words. Keep up the good work. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Excellent sonnet Deepak. Up to your usual high standard. Be well Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Ohhh....it's splendid... I particulary liked: "...A singing of angel's whispers appearing this stone to bless And hope awakens to lift sorrow's cloak a little while..." Great sonnet... [This message has been edited by LM (edited 08-18-2000).] |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
Demanding, insistent, opening new avenues of choice that sayes it all, great piece. There's a peace inside us all Let it be your friend It will help you carry on In the end There's a peace inside us all -Creed |
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