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Separation Anxiety |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA 
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Separation Anxiety It starts when I leave you in the mornings, The longing, the emptiness I feel, Like a part of me has been left behind. All day I dream of you, wanting to be with you, Remembering the night before, Us, together, alone. I clock-watch, willing the hands to move, The anticipation building as the hours drag by, Aching to be with you again. Rushing home, cursing the traffic, slow drivers, Wishing I lived closer…or never had to leave, Knowing that tomorrow it starts again. Newspapers crushed under tires, left in the rain, Unopened and unread mail on the countertop, Unmowed grass in the yard. And then I see you, gaze into a loveliness only imaginable, I touch you, feel your smoothness….and the passion starts, I move next to you, heart racing, breath coming in fits. My head spins, my eyes cloud over with desire, My inner being screams with ecstasy. I am one with the universe….I feel the love. And I know that I am just a keystroke away, From all that is good in you, My beautiful computer, my friend, companion and lover. (Yeah, I know, I need to get a life) Marv Hardin 07/10/00 |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Such passion!! Many would love to feel your fingers tickle their keys, but normally you can only gaze into one computer screen at a time and whisper to her your poetic lines. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Glad to have you back Hardrock!! The build up on this was something!! I loved it, can see alot of passion here, and if its your computer (lucky computer!!!)We must give it a name!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ok, you had me going there. I was lost in another moment of nostalgia, rushing home to be with someone wonderful..Remembering the days...Then-HA! It was your computer. My web and I have a similar relationship, but its notoriously difficult. Obviously a man.. Great poem, good humor too. "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
LOL! This is spectacular! You built it up to be about a woman, and suprised us all with the trick ending....I loved it!  |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~WooHoo Hardrock,....Hahaha... gosh you know,...in the beginning,...I was so sure that you were talking about ME. haha. So you don't mow the lawn or open your mail??? That bad 'eh? hhaahhaa. I'll get you here to Boston and get you a life. haha. I am SO kidding. I loved this poem. Take care. *Peace. ~PS,...don't be mad that I teased you. hahahaa. . |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Very well written, oh to share this passion with a computer, at times I know what you mean, but children and dinners come between me and that love. |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Congrats on a cool and well written poem! The build up was wonderful!  MagnoliaBlue ~My Skipper Jim I love you! Your Lady June~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Except for that last part, I thought...now there is a hap hap happy man...... Sigmund is waiting for us btw....lol Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
The damned thing is going to get us all divorced/sacked/imprisoned/starved to death or something like that - LOL - That poem was so good! And right on the spot! Good Show Hardrock - you have a lovely spirit within you and a very nice sense of humour! Deepak |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Thank you all for your kind words...but I really have to give credit to my computer. She's the one with the sense of humor...she has 4.3 "giggle" bytes of memory. (Sorry, I just couldn't help myself). Love you all, Hardrock |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
LOL!!! This is just great!  Enjoyed it immensely! |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
o_O..... you're nuts! but a good poem. ^_^ "I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel." ~Touch and Go |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
My dear friend Marv It's so good to read your amazing work again. This poem was really superb, and if you get this passionate about your PC, I can't wait to see what you can write when she takes second place to a human companion. You have a wonderful poetic gift. Thanks for sharing with us. Loved it. Love Sylvia |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Funny, when I was reading this I was thinking: I know that feeling, that's how I feel about dark passions Another brilliant poem, Marvin. Very well written, great flow, makes you feel the madness of addiction ... Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Hey, you know, sometimes a vivid imagination is far better than the reality of "life!" Great job! |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
yes my dear friend i have been gone for a few days and then i come back and get to read something so poet perfect and funny from you thanks hardrock for shareing this with us. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
I must agree with everyone here... you had me going!  Great poem Friend! Glad you are back to your funny self. Peace Once there was a darkness Deep and endless night You gave me everything you had Ahhhhhh you gave me light |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Well done Marv, well done! Enjoyed it very much. Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. -William Wordsworth- |
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