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Mount Mercy |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738
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I stood at the peak of Mount Mercy And looked for the compassion She proclaimed to possess. Looked over the jagged edge So cold, so hard At the flecks so far below. Waited, for the mercy To cloak me Envelop me (oh so breathless now) Oh, she promised me! This Mountain called Mercy Professed to understand, to care. Calm, so mute below The clock is ticking, slowly And then time stops. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Calm, so mute below The clock is ticking, slowly And then time stops. haunting piece loved this one and the ending is quiet intense. "Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Well done indeed - till time stops - you dont stop. Deepak |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi taramw, well to this reader,the first part of this poem is dramatic and reminds one of acting classes...its like you wont expect the speaker to do anything rash to herself.... thats why the imapct was doubly strong when i reached the ending..."And then time stops"...gosh,haunting line that will stay with me for a while  i enjoyed  |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
An intense piece, Tara. The ending is particulary effective as it leaves what happens open to interpretation. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading...where is this Mount Mercy? James |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
I agree with Lotharingia....it's that open interpretation at the end that clinches it. Nice work. Hardrock |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Same here, Tara, beautiful poem, and gives you pause at the end. Take care. Sandra "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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