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Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-07-05 01:30 AM

   Today i had a dream of her
     But today it was real
I called her up and talked to her
  Now i can't express how i feel
as i was talking my feet became weak
            Then
      i could not speak
  My legs i could not feel
  But with that i can deal
         I will pay
To even just say hi and bye
     For this dream girl
             Is
The only girl worth being my prize
   well at least in my eyes.

This is another one for my dear friend Jenn which is now on here. though its not one of my best i wrote it real fast after talking to her and chose not to edit it because it just came from my heart so i hope you all enjoyed.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

1 posted 2000-07-05 03:04 AM

That's a really sweet poem and your friend is very lucky to have it written about her. And don't edit it because it's perfect!

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2000-07-05 07:32 AM

Hi Jeremiah, I agree, that was sweet, and perfect as it is.

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

3 posted 2000-07-05 09:03 AM

Jeremiah...have you ever thought how many girls would love to have a guy write poetry to them...and to know they have that effect on him? Jenn is lucky to have you as a friend. As for the editing...I always say, "Writers write, editors edit"... nice job. Hardrock.

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

4 posted 2000-07-05 02:37 PM

~What a sweet talking guy. hehe. Love this and it's raw honesty. It's lovely. *Peace.

ChibiDeathscythe
Member

since 2000-06-09

Posts 128

5 posted 2000-07-05 02:42 PM

I Loved this, especially the end! You are a true to life poet.

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

6 posted 2000-07-05 07:27 PM

My dear friend, you are giving me the run for my words. Your poetry is awesome.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

DJLI
Member

since 2000-06-21

Posts 237
TN, USA

7 posted 2000-07-06 12:38 PM

as always, wonderful poetry...keep up the great works, I look forward to reading more and more

-by the way, the best things come from the heart.

if you don't like the message, don't kill the messenger.

Portia
Member

since 2000-05-18

Posts 157

8 posted 2000-07-07 11:07 AM

I love the sentiment expressed in this. I think everyone here knows I am all for a good love poem

That feeling that you would do anything for a look, a glance, just to be able to talk... oh yes. Well done.

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

9 posted 2000-07-07 11:09 AM

Woah Jeremiah! What a wonderful poem! Expressed perfectly! :0)

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

10 posted 2001-03-16 03:57 PM

Oooops, wow, I was looking through your old stuff and I just realized I've never replied to this one. I'm such a dork!! Jeremiah, you're a really great guy, and the fact that you wrote for me means so much... good luck in the army man!!

Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia

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