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Member

since 2000-06-11

Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-06-12 06:49 PM

  When did you stop believing?
  I never thought you would.

  I never thought I'd hurt you,
  even if I could.

  When did you give up?
  I always thought you strong.

  I never doubted our love,
  tell me was I wrong?

  Let me know how to fix it,
  I'll do all I can.

  But please just remember,
  I'm now a broken man.

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kynder
Senior Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida

1 posted 2000-06-12 06:57 PM

simply amazing here. this is your first one????? you have much power in your words. the last sentence especially. we forget so quick that we aren't the only ones hurt, others also have to heal their damaged hearts. Welcome to Dark!!!! waiting for more.....

kynder

The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson

bluebrdy65
Member

since 2000-05-16

Posts 276
Gladys,

2 posted 2000-06-12 11:31 PM

very beatiful poem.this one hits me deep
I have no words to explain how I feel
good work
Blue

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-06-12 11:39 PM

~Wow,...this is pain stricken and gripping this piece. I sense hurt, and fear, and confusion in this,...gosh, you know...you have evoked many feelings with this one. And seeing how I didn't say so on my last reply to your other poem,...which I apologize for...Uuumm,.Welcome here...and I truly look forward to more of your work. Take care. *Peace.

lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

4 posted 2000-06-13 06:52 AM

This is wonderful! The way you express with suchsimplicity how teo people can live alongside eachother without knowing what's going on in the other's head or why. Oh, and welcome, too.

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland

sgreybe
Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 209
London, UK

5 posted 2000-06-13 07:54 AM

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I almost can't believe this is your first post! Where have you been?

This is absolutely superb! Great expression, great linguistic usage.

I could feel the emotions and questions as I followed through the paragraphs.

Keep it up and welcome to the place of release.

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