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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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I have denounced the mechanics of Catholicism far too often, to claim an empathy for divine creation. Miracles for me are foreign day dreams, but internally I held the naked heavens without indication of religion. It was in the birth of galaxies that lovers were conceived, though the stars scattered to dust, and we fell to earth as halves. This alchemy unites us: separate elements in forlorn distance, but singular in heart My prayers are not born of masses, They are all dedications to you, my angel loved sexually and purely. Your temple is where I orbit. Siamese lovers are we, rediscovering the lost wonders across techno-communication until we share the same skin. Every atom of you radiates this purgatory, you are my everything. And soon will be for an eternity. In this life wait for me, I will be with you shortly. < !signature--> In the morning I am a recluse,lost in memory,ideal situations and convulsions... They built pop mart for Bono so he could gaze out across the bay and sing about mountains maybe" Whipping boy [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 12-30-2000).] |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
I liked this very much especially this part "It was in the birth of galaxies that lovers were conceived, though the stars scattered to dust, and we fell to earth as halves" your poem says to me that lovers are chosen in the begining of time and will eventually find eachother and unite until they for a whole. is a very nice and romantic thought "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN "There is no always forever, just this"-the cure |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
You've chosen very intense words to use in your poem which makes the whole piece very intense. Like how you explored your relationship to a point where you had me thinking the whole time what you were feeling. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Not the usual soppy love poem - it rocks Brian, it has heart and intellect and a deeply forlorn element... excellent writing...  K[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-30-2000).] |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
that was beautiful. reminds me of plato's myth of the androgynous. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I have to agree with the previous comments. This ROCKS Happy New Year Sandra |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Ginners, I believe, corny as it may sound, that we are part of the heavens and the stars, and also that there are souls that we have very strong connections with. Thanks for your very kind reply HiddenSparklez, love can be an intense emotion, thank you for your reply. K, I don't go for soppy love poems, you should know me better than that lol and you know how "deeply forlorn" I am. Thanksfor very generous words. Jannel, I am not familar with that Plato myth, so I will take your word for it. THanks for reading and replying. Sandra, thanks and happy new year to you too. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"In this life wait for me, I will be with you shortly." Enjoyed reading this Brian...James |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i finally found it, and i have to say this is breathtaking brian..........im at a loss for words about how this poem makes me feel. you always have just the right thing to say and you always say it in such a creative and beautiful way. ~Dawn "Like a soul without a mind, in a body without a heart, Im missing every part." Unfinished Sympathy-Massive Attack |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
James, thanks. Dawn, well I will hopefully have more words for you at the weekend. I will just say a simple thank you and send my love here, and save the more passionate thanks for when we are alone.  It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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