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A Broken Glass
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A Broken Glass |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
My Grip loosens and the glass falls I can do nothing to stop it, nor do I want to It is quite amazing really, beautiful in fact The perfect flips create a wonderful prismatic show Right before it hits all is still Then the first crack grows to many Pieces scatter about as scared birds in the park Then and only then do you realize There is no piecing, nor fixing it What was once truly unique … gone Only in that moment’s window do you truly see Only then can you be shown the value The value of what once was and can never again be There's a peace inside us all Let it be your friend It will help you carry on In the end There's a peace inside us all -Creed |
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*prevailing*darkness* Junior Member
since 2000-12-18
Posts 36Port Richey, FL |
Not only did I thouroughly enjoy the imagry and descriptions in your piece, but at the end your 'signature' is from creed who just happens to be my absolute favorite band! But really.... I really did enjoy this... it is so true... things so unique... we can be careless with them for just a moment, and then one moment later, they are gone. Non fixable, never to be seen again in the same way by anybody... remaining infamous only in memories. Great job!! Oh, and thank you for sharing this one...  *Always do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent imagery...which takes the reader right to the lesson...well done... |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
i liked this a lot. it was greatly visual. jann elizabeth |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
i know this has deep symbolism,but as far as just your descrption of the glass falling and breaking was amazing. mebe just because i'd never thought of it,the way it must happens,always happens so fast,you never think about the process,and thAt there actually is one. great poem. swamp creature "All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon |
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Jeffyf Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 49Muncie, IN |
Amazing! Never would I have ever dreamed of describing something as normal and everyday as dropping a glass. This is truely a wonderful work, an inspiration to us all to look for new material. Great lesson. Jeffy |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
Thanks prevailing on the comments. Also I have loved Creed before they went big. Sun Shine we learn lessons from every thing i am glad to have tought one here. jennel i am glad you liked it. Swamp you are completly right about there being deep symbolism. Jeff i look foward to reading it. Thank you all for the comments. There's a peace inside us all Let it be your friend It will help you carry on In the end There's a peace inside us all -Creed |
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