Dark Poetry #2 |
disenchanted |
raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
Tonight the worlds got me down But these days we are all wearing a thorny crown I used to be able to jest whish on upon a star But now my dreams seem so vary fare Now with the dawning I awake Each day more like a bitter pill I have to take Some how my life got stuck on survive More and more it’s hard to tell if I’m truly alive All my dreams have slowly gone bust I look around but there are so few I truly trust My eyes once held such wonder But in only a few short years I lost that hunger Still I know that I won’t give up Some how I will pull myself out of this slump (but right now I feel like such a chump) I haven’t lost hope, jest disenchanted Why do we all take our youth for granted I am not always lonely even if I am always alone |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
raleighbuttrfly, there's an old expression that says youth is wasted on the young. I don't believe the expression is true but you made it seem so in your poem. Excellent insight here and good flow. write on Kethry Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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Jeffyf Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 49Muncie, IN |
raleighbttrfly, Even those of us who still are in our youth may not have the luxury of taking it for granted. Sometimes "growing up too fast" is a reality, and taking youth for granted is no longer an option, because it's not there to take for granted. I quite enjoyed this poem. It touched me, and I believe that it has touched more people than just one. Keep writing. Jeffy |
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raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
kethy thank you for reading btw i love the signature you selected. jeffyf i know all about growing up too fast its a sad situation that seems to be happening more and more. you see I am only 21 jest turned 21 last mounth. this pome was more about me loseing my youth and befor i knew it it was gone. thanks for reading and I am glad you liked it. I am not always lonely even if I am always alone |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
This is true...we do think that our youth is 4ever...but we can always be young @ heart. ~~My soul lives in love, walks with serenity, writhes in hatred, and dies in violence.~~ Myself |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Wow...interesting read. I like it a lot. ~~My soul lives in love, walks with serenity, writhes in hatred, and dies in violence.~~ Myself |
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