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The Full Length Reflection of Himself
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The Full Length Reflection of Himself |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Full length Reflection of Himself It had been the ice cream, we can’t have cake without ice cream vanilla ice cream You go he said it was his birthday after all he would sit on the porch and wait into the afternoon Another reason lurked he was drinking and what he wanted was to sit on the porch with another beer not ice cream and drink into the afternoon His son of blond thatched hair had exchanged a blue eyed look with his wife a look of disappointment resignation and something else disgust, he thought They never came back a drunk driver’s final irony After the blissful numbness a wave so powerful so full of grinding pain hit him that he wished that he was dead it fell on him ripped through his fabric of pretension found his soul and squeezed it hard He screamed tore a chunk of hair from his head then took a hammer searching for his tormentor and found him in the bedroom in front of the bathroom door where he took the hammer to the full length reflection of himself until only small shards of glass remained scattered on the teal carpet |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Martie, You've painted such a vivid picture of this reality. Very touching and enlightening...and perhaps, should be read by those who suffer from this addiction. Sheila |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
GOB SMACKED. He screamed tore a chunk of hair from his head then took a hammer searching for his tormentor and found him in the bedroom in front of the bathroom door Thanks for gracing us with your presence here hon.  KWow. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
His son of blond thatched hair had exchanged a blue eyed look with his wife a look of disappointment resignation and something else disgust Wow I recognise these feelings Martie you have penned them well, as always. Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Martie, well written and heartbreaking. write on Kethry Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
thought you'd hide the poetic version of this in here did ya martie ... now you have me curious as to where the inspiration for both the story and the poem came from... humm nice writing my friend philip |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this was really great. the beginnign was intriguing and the end was unvbelievable. great work. jann elizabeth |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Powerful poem, Martie. Perhaps the people of M.A.D.D. would be interested in this? I stand in awe, again, my poet friend. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Descriptive and emotional writing..James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sheila--Thank you so much for the reply...I'm not sure those with the addiction would want to read it though. Kamla--What is GOB Smacked?? The wow I understood. Maree--Sorry to hear that you recognize these feelings...hugs! Kethry--Thank you for the reply...sometimes life IS heart break. Philip--You know what they say about curiosity and the cat??? Hmmm...some day I'll tell you. Jann--I'm glad you liked this poem...if you want to read the longer version it is called Sweet William, in Passion in Prose. serenity--thank you, my poet friend...what a good idea you had. James--thanks so much for stopping by. |
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