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bewitchment of a blasphemy
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bewitchment of a blasphemy |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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No. It's not a simple life. There is no parity. There is no rule, no measured speak... and I've no clarity. Everything of hurt, entwines... Each raw nerve, touches the other. Every hurt is amplified and pride of cry is smothered. All my pain and teeth in clench, every restless moment spent... every footstep towards the door and every footfall back for more - Oh damn my life! Be it undone... I rock myself to sleep... pounding head against the wall to prove I can still weep. I have to let it go, I know... I must let this be. Brave a trail of tears again - to journey on my blistered feet. Yet angels' choir of memory, harmony of seraphim, bewitchment of a blasphemy oh may I dream? please... dream of him? |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Woah!! This is one fabulous piece!  I saw the very image as I read every line... well done! Take care ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is beautiful wording: "I have to let it go, I know... I must let this be. Brave a trail of tears again - to journey on my blistered feet. Yet angels' choir of memory, harmony of seraphim, bewitchment of a blasphemy oh may I dream? please... dream of him?" What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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marcos New Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 8 |
this is beautiful, and i really, truly mean that in its unadorned sense i.e., beautiful without the quotation marks... wow, when i read a poem like this i am totally humbled. its really amazing, and what i find really great about it is your allusion to paradox (i think anyway? hahahah) i.e. everything of hurt entwines/each raw nerve touches the other...but i think one of the greatest lines is "every foostep towards the door and every footfall back for more" I honestly thought your poem was great look forward to reading some more. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ This just happens to be an excellent piece of writing. I like the way you're stretching ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Your words always seem to convey the feelings with such power. Take care!!! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Tara, Kathleen, marcos, Mom, and the dear Eagle...thank you much...I truly appreciate you all...and now..hello? I must be going...gotta sleep some time, and who knows? I just might dream....grin... |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
one word describes this piece of poetry INCREDIBLE!!!!!!!!! I have to let it go, I know... I must let this be. Brave a trail of tears again - to journey on my blistered feet. If we can do this.....how wonderful it would be! I loved it.....every word! Thank you! |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Very well done! The flow is smooth and I love the rhythm and rhyme of this piece. Enjoyed it very much With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this is so beautiful. my favorite line was "pounding my head against the wall to prove i can still weep" wow. jann elizabeth |
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