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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
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0 posted 2000-11-21 05:51 PM


Just to start off, I've done it!  I managed to write a poem in blank verse!  It may not have a much content as my usual poetry, but it is none the less in iambic pentameter.




Prophesy in Blank Verse

It is to be that there shall be a vast
Vision of a science so pure and so
Great that man will believe that he is God.
In the years that this power is unleash'd
A single man will rule above many.
The populace will lose their liberty.
Men's thoughts will be seen by those in power.

So cherish all the time you have right now,
In which you can be free from tyrany,
For it is my fear that the time of which
I have just spoken is now upon us.  

© Copyright 2000 fractal007 - All Rights Reserved
Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
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Small Town, Somewhere
1 posted 2000-11-22 05:12 AM


I'm not sure what blank verse is, but congratulations..    It's well written...And I really like the last verse.  
Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
2 posted 2000-11-22 12:55 PM


I am with BWA on this one, no clue what "blank verse" is  (call me wierd).  But well written.  Write from the heart is all that needs to be done!  

Peace
DkW


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


fractal007
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Posts 1958

3 posted 2000-11-22 01:15 PM


Thank you for your replies.  Blank verse is unrhymed iambic pentameter.  That is, meter with one unstressed and then one stressed syllable.  This makes it so that the poem has a sort of rhythm, like music.  

And so, this is the first time I've managed to pull this off.

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2000-11-26 01:32 AM


i thought this was great! I really liked this poem! The message rocked but surely i hope the time will not dawn upon us!


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
5 posted 2000-11-27 03:32 PM


i really liked the ending. random thought: did you know that ancient greek poetry had no rhyme. it relied strictly on meter. you did a really great job working withing the constraints of blank verse.

jann elizabeth

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