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stoned'
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since 2000-10-23
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0 posted 2000-11-17 01:29 PM



Cruel words, broken hearts, silent agonies ,twisted thoughts
Love was when life made no sense, till death dug in , and it was too late,
Every smile taken for granted , where every hand  was shoved away
Every light drenched in darkness , till the worst one gently raped her fate,
How was she to know kindness, when every eye was pooled in blood,
Miserably she touched all of them, till they too drank  in  the holy flood,
Smoke and silence was all she had,  she burned in the fire she had reaped herself,
But this gutless girl(so the devils thought) had her own unique taste!
She joined hands with the truth , in her  foolish haste,
What she found out was too hard on her ,a reality, she  just couldn’t believe,
Hurt never killed her, she was used to it, it was her guilt that made her leave,
For the first time in her life her poison didn’t work,  for the first time she could honestly feel ,
Pure was his soul, untouched and real, his innocent magic, how it helped her heal!
Till the end came and she couldn’t face it,like a coward she fled,tired n scared
Till devils came back ,and evil snared, darkening the soul she had once bared!
Now she goes about  once again ,greedily looking for her ignorant preys,
Unlucky she was , he still cries for her, for love couldn’t mend her deathly ways!



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1 posted 2000-11-18 12:54 PM


I enjoyed this poem. It sounds something like my poems. When you have a chance, read some of them.  

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



ThyWizard
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since 2000-08-06
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2 posted 2000-11-18 01:32 AM


I liked it...the rhythm took me a little to figure out, but the feeling of it was strong.  i really love the way the tone of the poem was hard at first, soft when she had him, then hard again when she lost him, cool effect.

" If who i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am I? " - unknown


Thy Wizard



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