Dark Poetry #2 |
The Misery Blade |
firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Slicing a canyon within your soul Blackness laughing at death's toll. Gouging so painfully into your heart Where it shreds your aspirations apart. Taken from finest material yet not steel There are no stitches for your wounds to heal. Draining your blood without the mess Carving piece by piece integrity's finess. Gasping for air though your throat's not cut The heaviness causes your eyes to shut. Yet the sharpest pain without a wound Don't worry my love it will be over soon. Gashing your mind into such confusion What once was real now just a sick illusion. This mental rage like a grinded axe Since now you've heard all of the facts. To your knees you beg but life slips away You try to speak but there's nothing to say. Thrash after thrash it cuts you deep No need to pray your usless soul to keep. Salty taste of blood now befalls your lips As the lies linger on the sharpened tip. Crying out for help but to no avail For you realize now that truth has failed. Dicing what's left of shattered fantasy Now becoming the ground meat of this fallacy. Weakness bestows upon your weary head A smile once vibrant will soon be dead. Begging for the pain to please come to an end Knowing all to well you will be here again. Seems no matter how many dreams are made They all fall bloody vicitims to The Misery Blade. Jeremy T. Sellers 11/17/00 9:05 PM "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Excellent vivid imagery, and a fine undertone of violent emotion and inevitability. I enjoyed this alot. Thanks for sharing. Regards, Olias |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
HOLY COW!!! Wooohoooo I just knew you could go "Dark!" Gawd I could feel the pain as I read this. With each line I went deeper and deeper into the poem! Swoooon baby Swoooon! DkW No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
OUCH!!!... I've felt this..and you've expressed it so well. You've outdone yourself, Jeremy. Sheila [This message has been edited by firecrakker (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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ThyWizard Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 56Chambersburg, PA, USA |
i haven't really read any of your other pieces, but this was definately an excellent first impression. i could almost taste the "salty taste of blood" and the weakness. Great Piece! " If who i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am I? " - unknown Thy Wizard |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
I'm glad you all enjoyed this piece. I've been playing with it for about a week now. It's the longest I've ever pondered prose. I've been there too...glad you liked it Wizard Jerm "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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