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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
“Excuse me.” I said. “I’d like to close this account. You see, I wrote a check, And I know I deposited a large sum Greater than what was withdrew And now the check bounced And I have to pay a penalty For something I worked hard to build up So something is wrong. I would like to close this account. And please give me back my heart.” [This message has been edited by Ron K. Fox (edited 11-08-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was very original and clever. I loved this. A great poem!!!!! I hope all is well and you get your heart back safe and sound. When a relationship is broken and such.....things get rough....and pain is inevitable  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
very fresh outlook on an ageold friend, pain. i do feel pain from this. i really enjoy it when poets go on a limb and create poetry not in the usual form, rhyme and meter. great piece!! kynder "Full is not heavy as empty, not nearly, my love, not nearly...." Fiona Apple |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Good stuff, Ron. Close the account. Great idea.. Sandra |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
cash in hand...I'm outta here. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Hope you get it back.. with interest.  Crakker |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Yes, very clever indeed! And how true that can be! "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Very very nice, Ron! I loved the subject. Great work once again! DkW P.S. But is it that easy? No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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