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Dark Poetry #2

Mating my Secrets

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2000-11-08 07:07 AM

Whispers of events unknown,
Revealing,
With whom is whom not alone,
Obsessions in truth concealed,
Observing,
Honesty is not revealed,
Omitting the truth of need,
Concealing,
In secrets not to be freed.

Paste the photo on the page transcribed,
Attaching the letter in which he replied,
Documented files that changed his life,
Beside the files hold those of his wife.

Gloom

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

1 posted 2000-11-08 07:51 AM

Now this I like...(or 'friglog' as some would say)

I like the shift in style here..from the broken flow to the solid block of words. It makes the whole piece..

Well done Prof...

K

The wind shifts like this:
Like a human without illusions...
This is how the wind shifts:
Like a human, heavy and heavy,
Who does not care.

W.S

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2000-11-08 04:35 PM

I loved this. Great poem and the change in style is a great part of the poem. I love your work!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2000-11-09 05:21 AM

Thank you, Severn,
Glad you liked it, I try to work with different forms,
Or vary my own (which this is).
The style can set the mood, and allow the flow,
The words only will show where the thoughts go.

Thank you, Dopey_Dope
I am pleased you like my words
And the way I arrange then on the page.

Gloom

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