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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738
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like a bird clipped wings no longer fly. like a bird been hit eyes shut tight no longer have sight. like a bird shot, left to die heart speared no tears to cry. ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Such a sad poem. Left me sitting there just thinking about it all. I love how you used a bird in here. Wonderful!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
wow, the visual impact of a bird, such a delicate creature, beautiful in flight, now clipped and dead, such is the heart, a fragile object. Nicely done. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
this is superb!! very powerful poem. thank you for sharing!! really, very very good!! kynder "Full is not heavy as empty, not nearly, my love, not nearly...." Fiona Apple |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Not only is the heart a delicate and fragile thing..but, love, itself, is so fragile, as well. Very nicely written. Sheila |
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PoetryNest Junior Member
since 2000-11-08
Posts 46Orlando, FL. 32703 |
Excellent form. Such a heart rendering little piece. Brings out the protective nature. Cynthia (A Dove) Proctor |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
tara hmm this is you at your most depressed. shocking images. like i said before, you can fly again. but wow this is some writing. its so effecting. josh |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
So very sad indeed! Makes this grey day seem more appropriate....Hope You are well... ~Sash~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I feel the nurturer in me coming out... very sad, little bird, but written quite well... -Tier |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Thank you everyone for your kind replies  I really did feel like this one night... images of a bird came to mind... and voila! this was the outcome  Thank you ~ Tara ~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Tara, I have felt that way, too. Excellent imagery. Sandra |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
*sigh*... Take Care. |
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marcos New Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 8 |
this is really heavy stuff, the way the language is so short, and brief, it makes it all the more depressing. But i think you expressed it very well, at least that's what i got from it, that you were so bummed out, and fed up, that there was only a small window to talk about your feelings. Definitely, relate to this one, its really good.. |
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PureM Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 22London, UK |
I really like this Tara, such powerful imagery...I look forward to reading more, Matt |
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