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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2000-11-03 09:01 AM



What Ifs'

cold words
do I hear.
emptiness
resides there.
not knowing,
still caring
but why?
is it useless
to think?
is one foolish
to sink
into a world
of what if's?
should one try?

is one trying
too hard,
removing
whats been charred
by the fire
that's burning
within?
is the charring
from hurt
being treated
like dirt
or desires
of skin
touching
skin?

~Wynter

© Copyright 2000 Wynter Bliss - All Rights Reserved
firecrakker
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since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia
1 posted 2000-11-03 07:07 PM


Wynter..
This being one of the first I've read from you, I must say I'm very impressed!  . The last question really burned in my mind, though..

is the charring
from hurt
being treated
like dirt
or desires
of skin
touching
skin?

I sometimes feel that the answer is both.. simultaneously...
I look forward to reading more.
Sheila


Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

2 posted 2000-11-03 10:29 PM


I agree with sheila...it can be both at the same time...and when you think about it, how can it not be? Ron

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
3 posted 2000-11-03 11:29 PM


Sheila- I am pleased you stopped to  respond...and yes these questions arise in me often.

Ron- you are right, both of you...thank you  

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
4 posted 2000-11-04 12:08 PM


I agree also.  This was so amazing to read.  Everything flowed beautifuly.  Great Job done here.

DkW


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
5 posted 2000-11-04 12:34 PM


Interesting! I once built a world out of "what ifs" - and ended up with only "may have beens"

Chris

Dopey Dope
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6 posted 2000-11-04 01:00 AM


The format of the poem rocks. The may have been's and the what if's.......eh?......interesting concepts. I usually reside within the mighta-coulda-shoulda-woulda-but-oh-wouldya-please-pass-the-mayo-ok-adios-abeen's

make sense? not really but that's ok



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
7 posted 2000-11-04 06:05 AM


DkW- thank you, I am happy you enjoyed the flow.

Christopher- yes those may have beens may be worse than what if's...thank you for  peeking in.

D_D- I don't know why but your responses make me smile and laugh, a needed combination. Thanks

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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