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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2000-10-31 03:53 AM

I felt it choke
within my throat
the dark hand strep
about my neck
in clutch-my eyes,
swollen blind
a sea of salt-
in gasp of air
no reprieve
of dream sweet sleep-
no more
the presence
of you there...

I guess I had to love
to lose.
I guess I had to learn
to choose
no more bones
tossed 'cross a fence...
no more a ragged
.... to pet
or kick
upon your mood...

I guess I had to learn to choose...
and I chose me--

over you.

[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 10-31-2000).]

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

1 posted 2000-10-31 07:59 AM

Yeah.... understood. Sometimes, we have to make that choice. Take care.

~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member

since 2000-03-21

Posts 680
Kansas

2 posted 2000-10-31 09:29 AM

Very Good!! The choices are always difficult. You described it well here.

Peace
DkW

No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2000-10-31 10:32 AM

                     "I guess I had to love
                     to lose.
                     I guess I had to learn
                     to choose"

The alternative would be not to love at all,
and loving always leaves something good.  I
think the real issue here is learning to choose...that's the hardest lesson to learn.

But once learned, we, and all we touch, are
better for it.

walk easy...

jwesley

bamagirl
Junior Member

since 2000-10-27

Posts 20

4 posted 2000-10-31 10:52 AM

Wow!!! I'm jealous of how well you got your feelings across on this one. Great job!!!

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

5 posted 2000-10-31 12:33 PM

Karen... *raising eyebrow*

Ahem - to the poem: Wow - you have that sardonic edge lady, the one that slices deeply and leaves a ragged scar behind.

Well done!

C

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2000-10-31 01:33 PM

Thanks to all for being so kind...and apologies to Chris...ouch...didn't think it was cussing considering the context...sorry.

Hugs to all...and many, many, thanks.

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

7 posted 2000-10-31 01:59 PM

Ron K. Fox
Senior Member

since 2000-10-24

Posts 925

8 posted 2000-10-31 07:06 PM

wow, this sounds like a totured love to me, an abused soul searching for freedom. Great work, expresses the pain well.

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox

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