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bamagirl Junior Member
since 2000-10-27
Posts 20 |
It caught me by surprise when I looked into your eyes. I saw something I wasn't prepared to see, you were looking back at me. You saw past my features, you saw past my smile, you saw past my act of an innocent child. You saw through me, now I feel it everyday. You found the key that kept me from walking away. You took my heart, that's when you gained control. You became the doorway to the windows of my soul. Now your promises are empty, and I rarely meet your eyes. When I do their tortured from being buried in your lies. Your skill of seeing through me was lost in the past. Now all you see is what used to be, and that's not strong enough to last. You saw through me, I remember everyday. You had the key that kept me from walking away. But when you broke my heart, that's when you lost control. You became the lock to the doorway of my soul. |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
bama you sure are in a dark mood. hope some sunshine comes your way. A beautiful and sad read. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Holy!!!!! Now thats a sad poem!  Life does move on my dear friend. Having a true love is a gift, not a chance!  Keep up your head.... it shall all get better soon.DkW No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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bamagirl Junior Member
since 2000-10-27
Posts 20 |
I'm not sad anymore. Both of these poems were written a while ago. Still afraid to trust, but not so down. Thanks for your comments!!! |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
That's why after going through this so many times that I always play cautiously now. It's a shame we have to, but you have to look out for "#1". Take care!  Jeremy "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Well I am glad you no longer feel the pain. And yes TRUST is a very difficult thing to gain again. Good luck DkW No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed your poem very much. I am glad you are not hurting as much now. Take care Suzanne |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
The expressiveness of your work has captured me and I'm glad that things are better for you now. As for the trust, well I think Jeremy has some good advice! Take care! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Hmm... amazing!  Loved the expression in this! ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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bamagirl Junior Member
since 2000-10-27
Posts 20 |
Thanks for all the comments. As for me and the trust issue, it's just coming one step at a time. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow I really liked this 1 great job! LOVE ELMO :Þ~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
As I read this poem I was thinking this was a happy ending poem but I was wrong. I like this one alot though. Keep it up!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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