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Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
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Mullica Hill, New Jersey

0 posted 2000-10-27 09:01 AM



He was standing alone in the street,
Surrounded by a cloud of blue smoke,
Behind him the sky was a cold and silent gray,
The wind was gently moving the hair from his face,
I was watching the way his eyes changed,
For the first time I saw who he really was,
Everything he tired to be melted into nothingness,
In one perfect moment my heart broke again,
He was perfect he was so much more,
Then he looked at me and it became real again,
I was losing him for good this time,
In one perfect moment I watched him slip away


"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

© Copyright 2000 Gin Leigh - All Rights Reserved
taramw
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-10-27 10:38 AM


Awww.... this is wonderful!    As I was reading, I really saw him standing there    Take care!
~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

bamagirl
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since 2000-10-27
Posts 20

2 posted 2000-10-27 11:15 AM


I like this. You made me feel the heart break as if it were my own.
MiseryDivine
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)
3 posted 2000-10-28 01:24 AM


genious! this created such a clear picture of him in my mind... i felt as if i was truly there! great work!  
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