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Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

0 posted 2000-10-21 05:51 PM

In the Beginning there was Light
And I, Me, We hovered over
The bright prismatic world
Then Darkness was created
Casting shadows before Its coming
Long shadows which occluded sight
Until at last, We hovered over the
Void

Such a strange dream
As We wipe sleep from Our eyes
But no coruscating hues appear
Save one
The inky black of deepsea fathoms
And together, We hover over the
Void

Alicat

If I were any more laid back, I'd be in a coma.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2000-10-21 10:16 PM

And here we are, still hovering..
Great writing. Strong image.
Catalinamoon

firecrakker
Member

since 2000-10-20

Posts 235
Virginia

2 posted 2000-10-22 03:40 PM

Alicat,

I've had to read and re-read this over several times.. and it haunts me. Ironic, that without the darkness, the light would not exist.. yet, the light evades us, so close within our reach. My head aches!! But, I love the symmetry and imagery of this piece.
Crakker

Jannel
Member

since 2000-01-18

Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

3 posted 2000-10-22 11:57 PM

this was really great in about ten or twelve ways. i'm not going to go into it all, but this was just a really good read, and full of terrific words and imagery.

If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whetever, you've beaten them.

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

4 posted 2000-10-23 09:49 AM

I too had to re-read this a couple of times...not because I didn't understand it, but because it was so refreshing. Dark imagery here...thought provoking stuff. Nicely done. Hardrock

Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

5 posted 2000-10-25 11:30 AM

Guys, I am simply amazed by your replies. This one was written about a dream where I was blind. The dream had no color save black, but sounds and touch came through. The question of course remained: what if I woke from such a dream and found it reality?

What amazed me, and I should've seen this coming, was how many ways this poem could be taken, and how all the conclusions are right. I wish to thank all of you for reminding me of that.

Pax Poeticus

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