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Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

0 posted 2000-10-18 01:24 PM


i was hoping that you were here
to tell me that i go about it all wrong

because i know i do.

i was hoping
that you would push me into the new

i wish that you could make silence dance
and that you would help me to laugh
as we both died

i wish that you were more than my loathing
more than my past
more than neon green and catchy slogans

i wish that you were real
or that you weren't
that i could touch you
or know there was nothing to touch
instead of flailing my arms in the dark

i was hoping that you would tell me
that i go about this all wrong because

i know i do

i was hoping that you could push me into the new.



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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2000-10-18 04:16 PM


Jannel,
This is a nice circular rhyme. It so easily goes back to the beginning and starts again. Well done.
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-10-18 11:45 PM


Yes, this is great! And I truly relate, especially to the following:

i wish that you were real
or that you weren't
that i could touch you
or know there was nothing to touch
instead of flailing my arms in the dark

Take care
Catalinamoon

Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
3 posted 2000-10-19 01:38 AM


this has several inspirations, but the main one is a bunch of posters around campus that say "do you agree with andy?" they popped up last week, and everyone was theorizing as to what andy was all about. as it turned out, they were from a religious organization on campus, and i was slightly disappointed that all of my fantasies about andy had been disproven. so this is my ode to andy.

jann elizabeth

Don't take any wooden nickels
When you sell your soul
-the eels

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