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Jonas Senior Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 796Oregon 
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Damn biting hunger clawing from within until I scream in the night trying hard to do what’s right and not beat my fists on the floor I’m an out of control derelict out of touch with reality living on a dream and breathing hope 10/15/00 |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Short but potent. Great work.  Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like the way you presented this poem..james |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
this sounds like something i would write, i love the presentations of the lines, all in all it was short but sweet, good work. Much love, ONe love peace..... |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this was incredibly intense all the way through. i liked it a lot. jann elizabeth Don't take any wooden nickels When you sell your soul -the eels |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Jonas, this so expressed the way I have been feeling. Like you want to scream uncontrollably, but you just barely stoop yourself. Very strong poem. Hope you are not as down as this sounds. If you are, let me just say I am right there with you. Catalinamoon |
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