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Clouds Surround
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Clouds Surround |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Clouds surround but not the nimbus, cirrus clouds of bright and shining day clouds abound strangling my esophagus that darken hope in hues of gray clouds are found in the dank sarcophagus that used to be mind at play clouds hang round mocking all the dreams of us and offering no hope to pray clouds, have sound seductive, soft, susurrus that want to steal my sense away clouds abound so I'll disappear without a fuss quietly, gently, with no melee. Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
K, this has so many sides within it. You know what, I don't want to disappear quietly. It's not fair. Very interesting poem here, relating all around. Sandra |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sandra, I don't want to go quietly either. I want to go kicking and screaming so that everyone knows I'm hurting. Whether I will or not is anyone's guess. Thanks for the response, sorry you could relate. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
nice. i thought the rhyme pattern was fun, and it gave an opportunity to use some really great words. i especially like the ending. jann elizabeth Don't take any wooden nickels When you sell your soul -the eels |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks Jannel, for the response and the kind words. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I don't know, if I ever got in a state without caring anymore I'd just go quietly, like I live my life now and I'd doubt anyone would notice my departure. I enjoyed this. It's how I feel. Joy |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Joy14, thanks for responding but sorry you feel that way. It's not a good way to feel. Be well Kethry. Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Kethry - This is outstanding !!! - I love the way you carried the pattern from verse to verse Simply wonderful!!! ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wil, thanks. You are great at the compliment thimgy. Wonderful Wow. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Hey hon great work here as always LOL I expect no less in fact. LOL I am never quiet and I will NOT go quietly, and the cloud euphinism (?) is perfect. Wrong word there?????? Namaste my friend. Isis *Good will towards all beings is the highest religion* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Isis, thank you so much for your kind words and for stopping by. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
kethry clouds are wonderful to write about. your amazing rhymes portrayed them at their marshmallowy, edible best. so pretty. josh |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ilph, thanks for stopping by, glad you thought the clouds were pretty. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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