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Misrepresentations of mistaken love
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Misrepresentations of mistaken love |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Cut the cake of love and throw it on the floor put your foot down harshly, stomp till it's no more. Take a dream of happy, turn it inside out crush a loving heart, until it fills with doubt. Easily deny me after you seduce empty hope you proffered, then you cut me loose. Lover of another time and place is all though I dream of future, you just let me fall. Nightmare I deny, yet still it seeks to find wrapped in pain and sorrow, darkness close behind. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Wow..thats exactly how i was feeling ha..how did you know..alot of energy in this one..  loved it~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Hon, I know the hurt and confusion you are feeling over this 'scoundrel'. Please know and remember it's HIS loss, not yours...... *hugs of understanding* Isis *Good will towards all beings is the highest religion* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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MiseryDivine Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh) |
what a bast*rd....lol...i've been there....cheer up! hes probably not worth it anyways....great poem All i want in life is to be happy It seems to me How messed up things can be Everytime i get ahead I fell more dead ~KoRn~~ |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Oh Cat , I loved the passion you had in this one. You showed your anger yet still kept it peaceful. Beautiful work here, I love it. DkW No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow, this is great. I know it's easy to say things like "he's not worth it" and "it's his loss" but those are just empty words when you can only feel your loss and worthlessness comparing to the one you adore even though he keeps hurting you... Anyway, I'm not gonna say stuff like that and it kinda narrows down my options... Again, I really understand what you mean, and I know there's not much to advise in this case. Maybe someday the pain goes away, I still haven't gotten there. Take Care. "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this has a great opening image. i really liked the cake stomping. it was something i never would have in a million years thought of, and it worked quite well. jann elizabeth Don't take any wooden nickels When you sell your soul -the eels |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
wow you really tore love to shreds with this one. merciless. maybe with the right glue you can stick it back together. hope so. josh. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sandra, *HuGS**HuGS**HuGS**HuGS* as many as you need till your soul is free again and you stop your bleed *smiles**smiles*smiles**smiles* all of them them for you stretching for a million miles may they see you through *tears**tears**tears**tears* from my heart to yours I'll cry with you, rest your fears and my laugh outpours. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Sandra...I read this poem and your other post "Impossibility"...this one shows the anger, the other one the hurt. Both are excellent. I can't begin to understand all the emotions you are feeling, but I will be there for you. Hardrock |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Ok...Im going to insist you re-build until you my dear lady are Designed To Cover The Cost, or at least print it out and post it someplace!! You know Im here for you, and you know you deserve better!! Great poem! |
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darkstar Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230Port Richey, Fl, USA |
Really great poem...it's always hard when that happens...just know everyone here is there for you and you'll get though it... Dark Star |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
my moonbeam... we always seem to go thru the same things at the same time. what a poem. your imagery and flow remain outstanding. even in your pain. love ya girl kynder "Full is not heavy as empty, not nearly, my love, not nearly...." Fiona Apple |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
wow sandra that is a vivid scene...I can feel the anger and hurt...the smashing of the cake, smeared on the floor, heel grinding it into the floor...I can imagine you wish it was that person being smeared all over...when you pour it out like this you release it...let it go...you will find better days ahead, you sure do deserve them...hey, you write damn good too, if I haven't said that. chin up girl, smile. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
wow sandra that is a vivid scene...I can feel the anger and hurt...the smashing of the cake, smeared on the floor, heel grinding it into the floor...I can imagine you wish it was that person being smeared all over...when you pour it out like this you release it...let it go...you will find better days ahead, you sure do deserve them...hey, you write damn good too, if I haven't said that. chin up girl, smile. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A lot of feeling in this poem...pain pain and more pain. I hope all gets better!!!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
This is very intense, and powerful. You have such an incredible ability to express your pain. This is one of my favorites. ...beth |
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Night Chica Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 39Vermont |
Cat - This poem hits close to home, and the vivid imagery you create helps to define the things that are happening in my life. This was a wonderfully done poem. Hang in there, hon, cuz if you fall u'll hurt all the broken bodies that lay down in the abyss (me included) ;-) Megs I was never one to patiently pick up broken fragments and glue them together again and tell myself that the mended whole was as good as new. What is broken is broken- and I'd rather remember it as it was at its best than mend it and see the broken places as long as I lived. -- Margaret Mitchell |
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