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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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The package said to just take one, but instead I just took three. I didn't care much for the ride, I just wanted to escape me. Escape the problems that I faced, oh the joy of life. I couldn't deal with the pain, all the turmoil and strife. Oh so sad, they all say, for someone so young to die. And I guess the only known reason, will remain between you and I. |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
All I can say is... I know what you mean. Good job. |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
I know those pills all too well. ...beth "And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..." - REA |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Understood and felt...your piece will speak to many I'm sure~ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey Allysa... you've written a lot of pain into this one. Very sad indeed. It seems to infer suicidal tendencies - if not, then I apologize. Just to let you know though, we have to monitor the poems here to make sure they follow our guidelines, which state that posting poems on suicide isn't allowed. If you want to talk at all about this, feel free to email me.  K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I really don't know what this is about. Basically just wanting to escape life for a while but it going to far. I guess, I dunno. Maybe about Oding, I duno. |
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CitiZen-One Member
since 2000-09-22
Posts 84New Mexico |
Yes indeed, I know of those little tabs of heaven that fall a man down to hell. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Allysa~ Escaping this dream isnt reality. I really with it was cause I would like to escape it myself. But not on these terms. I want to die happy and try to at least make the best of what I have left on this planet. Cause for we know we can die any day. If you want to talk to me email me. Ok??? ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
a look in the mirror shows just one but it sure as hel* don't look like me been through things most don't know exist just wanted to forget this [profanity edited] burning within can get out of hand to the point of dining spam cryptic comes most feelings descriptive helps the healing I don't know you, but you have a way with words that shouldn't be missed. Thank you for your poem, and smile if you can, you are loved. J.L. Koehler [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 10-11-2000).] |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Okay, for future referances, in case anyone gets worried, not all of my poems are about me. Some of them are about me, but mostly the broken hearted ones. This one is about a part of me, and a part of my friends. Citzen1: thanks much for replying. Erin: I want to die happy to, but it's being alone that kills me. Carolinadreams: it's nice to know im loved. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Allysa~ I was gonna email you because I was gonna share something with you but I couldnt so maybe next time I will tell you. ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Allysa, Being a paramedic, I'm the one usually trying to prevent these pills from absorbing into your system However, I wonder just how many of "these bottles" I might have laying around for this very same use. Great work...MORE!Jeremy "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is a great poem! It really hits home with the way people often feel in problems. It's often quite a bit different when you experience the problem yourself! But I just hope that you one day see yourself find a better way... |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
"that's the sound of a bottle when it's hollow swallow 'em all, wallow and drown in your sorrow. and tomorrow, you're probably gonna wanna do it again." this reminds me of a few i've written. well expressed thoughts, well penned. i live this. I am reminded of the immortal words of Socrates, who said, "I drank what?" |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
this was a grat poem. I feel that way a lot. sometimes I want to grt in my car, get in 5th gear and send it flying strait off of a cliff. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks all for replying!! Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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ill_tactics Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 149 |
Very good poem, I understand what youre goin through, but I cant say i've walked in your shoes. Much love, One love peace... |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
i cant say ive walked those shoes either............. Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
Beautiful poem...I wore those shoes...I go barefoot now. Love is the law, love under will. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa -- is this about nitsuj? Keep your head up girl...i fell your pain I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
This pretty much has absolutely nothing to do with me, or nitusj, for that matter, except that he called me three times this weekend, and I really needed that. Well, kinda bumping this up for more ppl to read!!! C ya!! Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Allysa...I understand perfectly what you are writing about here. As for having suicidal ideation or tendencies...I too write about things from which I am actually removed. The poem itself is well written, touches on a common theme and has, obviously, reached many people. Well done. Hardrock |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Geez you guys make me feel special. Thanks to everyone who replied, I feel loved. I've never goten so many replies b4. Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
bump I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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