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Dark Poetry #2

like a cancer.

silentsky
Member

since 2000-08-09

Posts 114

0 posted 2000-10-02 03:43 PM

turn me inside out
if you dare

you'll get the same thing
just me and my fears

i like to play my game
and i like to feel my tears

little girl of a million islands
likes to beg
likes to plead
likes to make believe

and
shes screwed like the little child she'd like to be

shes on her knees
waiting for her kick in the face

her black eyes intense
her body twisted
in the shape of the northern star

but how long will it go on
with the growing knowledge
that nobody can swim who's determined not to.

Jannel
Member

since 2000-01-18

Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

1 posted 2000-10-02 06:04 PM

very intense. the last line is very poignant.

shadydaze
Member

since 2000-10-02

Posts 85

2 posted 2000-10-03 12:59 PM

good poem, good writing. more please.

firejerm
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA

3 posted 2000-10-04 11:00 PM

Ouch!

This was very intense...it hurts, but I enjoyed it...that sounds sinister doesn't it? I don't know how else to say it.

Jeremy

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

ilph
Member

since 2000-07-28

Posts 78

4 posted 2000-10-05 05:30 AM

shira,

you make pain romantic and harsh, and everything in between.

you surely have a way.

josh.

boardman
Junior Member

since 2000-05-09

Posts 44

5 posted 2000-10-06 12:13 PM

Hi,

Very intersesting read.

My favorite piece is
little girl of a million islands
likes to beg
likes to plead
likes to make believe

I agree with shadydaze, more please!

Vince

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