Dark Poetry #2 |
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Beautiful....rewrite...please respond |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
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Beautiful He sat silently apart from the sociality of the others. Head bowed, slightly in a futile attempt to hide within the shadows of the ambiguous candlelight. Uttering not a sound, yet, his eyes speaking with implicit invitation. Drawn to his unhampered mystery as never before. My mind turned wildly with ravenous thought. His steal gray eyes, enlaced with enchantment, seemed to enslave as they whispered my name. So perfect in his masculinity, yet, so frail his demure. I escaped wearily into his beauty. The beauty of a creature feared by those that judge with vicious harshness. Unforgiving in his ways and scorned for his existence. He shivered slightly at my stare as I stepped slowly into his expanse. The frigidity of his skin illuminating the air and caressing my shadow gently. Taken back by this exquisite presence as my heart beat uncontrollably within my own corpus. A intonation beyond sweet compare escaped effortlessly from his divine form... "I hear your willingness to feed my starving desires. I hear the precious blood slipping ever so gently through your longing veins. Are you willing, willing to love a creature such as I, to join me in my solitude for eternity?" Without hesitation nor slightest apprehension I became one with this beautifully misunderstood creature and drown with docile adoration within his divested configuration to discover passionate gallantry within his pallid phlebotomy. Beautiful. "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I confess I didn't fully understand this one, but I enjoyed it. Kathleen |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Things are not always as they seem!! Beautiful work hon ![]() *Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
There's a bit of Vampire in us all I guess!........reminds me of The Phantom Of The Opera......and that's not a bad thing. Nice Writing Jon |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Great story, I like this a lot. Sandra |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this was a very beautiful portrait... vampiric? i really loved it. jann elizabeth |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
enchanting. a little vampiric? lovely and dark. |
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shadydaze Member
since 2000-10-02
Posts 85 |
what a matserpiece. worthy of many praises. i enjoyed this tremendously. (by the way, is this poem about me?) ![]() |
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shadydaze Member
since 2000-10-02
Posts 85 |
what a matserpiece. worthy of many praises. i enjoyed this tremendously. (by the way, is this poem about me?) ![]() |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
I thank you all and am honoured that you enjoyed, though, I must admitt, I never thought this would get such wonderful responses... and yes, there is a bit of vampire in us all... : }~ Until...ali "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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