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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
Dissident by J.Sage Could mixed feelings and a stuffy nose lure you back? Would you let me climb your hill one more time? My mountain man Lover of mine No dissidence Could keep out the heart - Ache and heartfelt love Unending I fear All I want is to hold you Can you hear me laugh at myself From where you are? Did you laugh too? At the notion of our affairs With others and each other No distraction big enough to keep me from your illness Sick inside Sneezes come with dissidence You keep me away I commit to my haze and my disease That you gave to me But I hope each time I die That you can hear me scream One knee down I kneel to my fantasy Love that will not subside Repulsed me until I gave into the disease Of a love that won't go And a lover that won't stay Come home I dream of a prayer That would bring you back I kneel I propose to my disease The unending desire (fantasy) that my dissident lover will return to me. |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
This is so incredibly different....I love it! Until...ali "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
thank you! different is good, in my opinion.  -Jes |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
It is very unique Very interesting poem, I enjoyed reading and liked it a lot. Take Care! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
Thank you! I understand that it isn't the most easily interpreted poem and I hope that doesn't turn too many of you off, but when I read a poem, sometimes the most personal touches and abstract metaphors make me love and appreciate it even more. I'm glad that this personal little poem of mine was appreciated by someone other than me. -Jes |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
Great Job here J this made me think. Its really deep. Loved it Blue. It always amazes me that the more I read on here the poems just seem to get better and better. |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
Thank you, Blue. really deep? Hope that's good and not contrived. I only write what I feel. Thank you for your response. -Jes |
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