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bluebrdy65
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since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,

0 posted 2000-09-21 04:41 PM


I am drowning
in the ocean of loneliness

Being pulled down into
the abyss forever

The darkness surrounds me
sucking me into its eternal bliss.....

© Copyright 2000 Janie M. Williams - All Rights Reserved
CrEaTuRe
Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
1 posted 2000-09-22 12:33 PM


short and0 snappy and with a effective effect  
*one may drown but sometimes it is only those who are drowning are able to save themselves from being pulled down beneath*


Love CoMeS To ThOsE WhO Still HoPe AlThOuGh They've BeeN DiSaPpOiNteD,To ThOsE WhO StiLL BeLiEvE AlThOuGh ThEy'Ve BeeN BeTraYeD,LoVe KeEpS ThEm GoInG

taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

2 posted 2000-09-22 08:15 AM


I like how you've expressed this... with such few words    I do hope your abyss isn't forever.  Take care.

~ Tara ~

"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish

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