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xEmperorEmber
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since 2000-03-28
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0 posted 2000-09-06 11:28 PM



the last drop of dew falls from the last
red rose, our winter has finally come to bloom

the drop freezes to ice before it even
strikes the grass and when it does, the
blade shatters into diamonds... and is
carried off with the wind

the screams of the void fill my fragile soul,
its the only thing that wont shatter it


and all thats left that can still stand
pure is the vision of
a virgin, in a field of ice... because
shes the only one who can still cry


but her tears harden from the cold
and fall upon earth just as harshly
as the dew from the last red rose

niether any significance

final piece of purity in a world that has
grown sour, time freezes and its our final hour


dont be bothered because before now you
slowly grew numb
it doesnt matter if you saw it coming,
because now you cant even care


the sky melts from blue to grey and
washes all the normal beauty
then leaves me with a stained and dark heart

the virgin starves
because no one is there to feed her
her red cheeks go pale
and she freezes
and waits to be shattered by a tear


© Copyright 2000 Jimi Hendrix - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-09-06 11:55 PM


Dark and stark in it's finality.  Great imagery here, a dark tale well told!  

*Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~



Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
2 posted 2000-09-07 04:04 AM


wow...this was just great....(hehe, virgin, roses...sorta my things...) I just read it three times...and if it's ok with you, I'm gonna print it...wow, loved it soooo much!!!

lots of love, Vrigin Suïcide...


"I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..."

Love is hard to live...
Try to live life in love....

LM
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since 2000-08-03
Posts 585

3 posted 2000-09-07 04:16 AM


Beautiful imagery  
Great job, take care!

silentsky
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 114

4 posted 2000-09-07 10:01 AM


absoloutely beautiful...
i could see myself standing in the field almost...you got me  
shira

Jannel
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
5 posted 2000-09-07 01:16 PM


i watched this in my mind and it was beautiful and chilling
Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258
meet Morgana
6 posted 2000-09-07 05:09 PM


*looks at the other replies* See....I told ya it was great. Hmm...wonderful imagery, chilling, beautiful, blah, blah, blah...you get the idea.   Keep writing! (pwease)

                             LoVe,
                             Angel


Don't mess with the bull, young man. You'll get the horns.

~*Guardian of Light*~


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