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Dark Poetry #2

Pits of Despair

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2000-08-28 07:40 PM

Dancing round pits of despair
the abyss is ever near
sometimes sprightly footwork there
can help me to roll clear

I warily, skip around the edge
with blurred, shuffle of quick feet
it's like sliding, along a ledge
and I never will dare, sleep

from anxiety-ridden crisis
I wildly, flailingly, spin
till overcome by darkness
concede defeat, and just give in.

the howling pits beside me stay
seeking to devour
apprehension grows day by day
waiting for the hour.

Some days I am lucky
avoid the pits and then
they await to strike me
and cast me down again

and I'm never free of them
of their seducing sway
they find my cold, dark, hidey holes
though I run, run ,run away

my life is spent in torment, all
anticipating days
when I succumb to the thrall
and darkness, always stays.

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

1 posted 2000-08-28 08:15 PM

Very powerful thoughts you have brought here. Great work !!!!. I like, I like.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

MiseryDivine
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)

2 posted 2000-08-28 11:13 PM

i likes this very much tooooo....great job!

All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

JSage
Member

since 2000-08-25

Posts 91
Nashua, NH USA

3 posted 2000-08-28 11:24 PM

very good. excellent rhyming! I know those pits of despair... I think we all have our own.

-Jes

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

4 posted 2000-08-29 04:06 AM

Thank you Xeonox for your kind words.
MiseryDivine -Thank you
Jes thanks for the comment about rhyme. Rhyming is easy for me it in free verse I get lost.

Be well
Kethry

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