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Below the abyss |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods 
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From sanity I fell Into arms of lunacy In stifling darkness I trembled From the hand of God Into the grip of Lucifer I sufocate as he quells my prayer In despair I wisper in a choked voice; -Oh how far the lovely has gone Sinking, fearing Alas! How deep I've sunk Into this greyish dark lake, fathomless and cold Below a layer of frost, a little sound reminds me How high the beautiful has flown And now it seems, I'm just a stranger to myself And reluctantly I go, just a bit further down the road Peering through the thickening fog Losing my soul in the everlasting mist I've got nothing more to sell Nothing more to scream nor tell Guess I'm all yours now All yours < !signature--> De profundis clamo ad te Domine! [This message has been edited by Broken (edited 06-22-2000).] |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Well Done, Broken. I like the "giving over" of oneself to the Lucifer of despair.....how it all came together. Good piece of writing. Hardrock |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! this is very vivid. "I've got nothing more to sell", I often feel like that God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Great writing! Description of feeling etc. I too have felt that this is all I am and have and it's yours.. do you even want it? Know what you mean hon..  |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a poem i think that everyone can feel we all go down the path sometime. and some never find their way out of the fog. great piece here thanks I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
This is relly good Broken, I really like this one. To sale everything and to give up with nothing left, god I've felt this before and not to long back. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Broken...my dear friend...please don't let yourself fall astray so far that you cannot come back. I understand your struggle...but I would miss you very much so please don't let yourself go this way. This was a beautiful poem....very vivid and honest...I'm never disappointed. Sorry it took me so long but I'm rarely ever here anymore. All my love and best wishes are sent to you...my dark angel. Take care D.E. Listen to your heart for it knows the way even when you don't. ~*Angel of Darkness*~ "So what are we, helpless? Puppets? No, the big moments are gonna come...you can't help that. It's what you do afterwards that counts. That's when you find out who you really are. You'll see what I mean..." -Whistler *+Daughter of Darkness+* |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
Gotta love you guys! Flattered by all your replies. Take care you all ~Broken~ Oh God! Why the angels fall first? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful poem. It hit the spot! I loved this so much. The ending put me in awe.. "I've got nothing more to sell Nothing more to scream nor tell Guess I'm all yours now All yours" WONDERFUL!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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