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Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
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Somewhere, between here and there

0 posted 2000-08-27 09:33 PM



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I know a girl, she’s much more than meets the eyes,
She may look cheap in faded jeans and crop tops,
But if you’d only take the time to look into her eyes,
You’d discover a world lost to in most people’s sighs,
I bet than you’d understand why she cries, why she’s shy,
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She may be quiet and shy, but to know her is to know divine,
To have her love, is to have a piece of heaven,
She may look cheap in faded jeans and tank tops,
But if you look past the surface, you’ll find a girl who shines,
Then I bet you’d see why those who know her best, don’t insult her dress.
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Does that even look like a tree?  Anyway...



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Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-08-27 09:47 PM


Spreading insanity one post at atime!!!!! LOL  I can feel it creeping in already LOL
I really enjoyed your attempt at lame art, but hon sorry to be the one to break the news to you, that mass of lines, doesn't look like a tree, more like a building!! LOL
But I like the whole thing anyways  

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-08-27 09:49 PM


Sooorrrryyy!!!!!!!  I came back and looked again, I was blind, I didn't see it the first time!!!!!  It certainly DOES look like a tree, my mistake *blushing*..  So it's great hon, it really is, you clever thing you!!!  LOL                    

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


sonjes
Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-08-27 09:49 PM


Forgive me please my density
But what significance is the tree?
Your art prehistoric at the best
Your words indeed have impressed.

Seriously...I enjoyed the poem, but I don't get the connection...  < !signature-->
But, yes it looks like a tree

Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
           -Enigma



[This message has been edited by sonjes (edited 08-27-2000).]

Deranger
Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
4 posted 2000-08-27 10:04 PM


Well, the connection is very subtle…this chick in the poem and the rest of my friends all hang out under this one tree….so that’s it.

Well, thanks for the replies guys (that rhymes!),



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Chanson
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since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle
5 posted 2000-08-27 10:15 PM


Yes, it looks like a topped pine   ...chanson~

[This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 08-27-2000).]

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