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Beginning the End
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Beginning the End |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA 
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Burning of my soul, Spray me with the artic wind, Tantalizing my senses invoking the demons of the past, Looking inwardly I realize the truth, Falsely finally loosens it’s grasp, Barren soul summons the return of the future, The end has begun as time approaches midnight, Securing the senses as they see the very light, Fissures in my mission I finally realize. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). [This message has been edited by Xeonox (edited 08-28-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
My idea for a title taken from the very words you have written..."Approaching Midnight". |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
For a thought-provoking poem like this, how about "Midnight Paradox"... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Great poem. How about "Broken Circles" or "Midnight Blue" for a title.  Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Nice poem, almost creepy. I sugest Midnight like the others or "Last Hour" "Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish" ~ |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
"Burning The Midnight Irony" (I go for funky titles. *grin*) Good write, Xeonox....chanson~ |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
So many great titles. So hard to choose. Ahhhhhhhhhhh! LOL Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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MiseryDivine Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh) |
holy .....um....oops...no but really...this is so awesome! dude i love it! youre just too good....n i like all those peoples ideas too! |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Midnight Mission seems good to me. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Barren Future...Future Lays Barren...or any of the others..all good oh my this one caused me to sighhh deeply..thank you X, I needed that... ~~soft hugs Maureen |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
The titles just keeps on coming. I like this. Thank you all.Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
Beginning the End. I don't know why, but that just popped into my head. I REALLY REALLY liked this poem, though!!  Creepy and haunting... dreading, and somehow hoping. Great work!! "I've fallen asleep, slept so sound. Fallen so fast, I missed the ground" ~Lil OnE~ |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Lil one, I will choose your title. Beginning the End. Thank you for your support. Ronil Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
well written... If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
Xeonox, Thanks for choosing my suggested title! I'm honored  lol. Really, though, I LOVE IT!!!! Wish I had written it... it's awesome.I run, I fall. I walk, I sometimes crawl. I give, I take. I bend and yet somehow I break ~Lil OnE~ |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
But remember that comments such as yours inspire me to write. Without you guys I am incomplete. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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