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Xeonox
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0 posted 2000-08-27 12:20 PM



Burning of my soul,

Spray me with the artic wind,

Tantalizing my senses invoking the demons of the past,

Looking inwardly I realize the truth,

Falsely finally loosens it’s grasp,

Barren soul summons the return of the future,

The end has begun as time approaches midnight,

Securing the senses as they see the very light,

Fissures in my mission I finally realize.
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Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).




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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2000-08-27 01:07 AM


My idea for a title taken from the very words you have written..."Approaching Midnight".
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2 posted 2000-08-27 02:11 AM


For a thought-provoking poem like this, how about "Midnight Paradox"...
Kethry
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3 posted 2000-08-27 06:04 AM


Great poem. How about "Broken Circles" or "Midnight Blue" for a title.  
Be well
Kethry


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but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

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4 posted 2000-08-27 07:20 AM


Nice poem, almost creepy. I sugest Midnight like the others or "Last Hour"

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5 posted 2000-08-27 07:27 AM


"Burning The Midnight Irony"

(I go for funky titles. *grin*) Good write, Xeonox....chanson~

Xeonox
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6 posted 2000-08-27 02:54 PM


So many great titles. So hard to choose. Ahhhhhhhhhhh! LOL  

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

MiseryDivine
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7 posted 2000-08-27 11:53 PM


holy .....um....oops...no but really...this is so awesome! dude i love it! youre just too good....n i like all those peoples ideas too!
Rosebud1229
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8 posted 2000-08-28 12:02 PM


Midnight Mission seems good to me.
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9 posted 2000-08-28 12:23 PM


Barren Future...Future Lays Barren...or any of the others..all good  


oh my  this one caused me to sighhh deeply..thank you X, I needed that...
~~soft hugs
Maureen

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10 posted 2000-08-28 04:27 PM


The titles just keeps on coming. I like this.   Thank you all.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

Lil OnE
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11 posted 2000-08-28 07:28 PM


Beginning the End. I don't know why, but that just popped into my head. I REALLY REALLY liked this poem, though!!   Creepy and haunting... dreading, and somehow hoping. Great work!!

"I've fallen asleep, slept so sound.
Fallen so fast,
I missed the ground"
~Lil OnE~


Xeonox
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12 posted 2000-08-28 08:11 PM


Lil one, I will choose your title. Beginning the End. Thank you for your support.

Ronil  

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

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13 posted 2000-08-29 12:39 PM


well written...


If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise?
Avanti Rao



Lil OnE
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14 posted 2000-08-29 06:59 PM


Xeonox,
   Thanks for choosing my suggested title! I'm honored   lol. Really, though, I LOVE IT!!!! Wish I had written it... it's awesome.


I run, I fall. I walk, I sometimes crawl. I give, I take. I bend and yet somehow I break
~Lil OnE~


Xeonox
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15 posted 2000-08-29 10:03 PM


But remember that comments such as yours inspire me to write. Without you guys I am incomplete.  

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

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