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Mass Confusion |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Doubts, like webs, obscure my brain, search for truth, but all in vain. I walk to you through foggy mist not sure, unknown, I feel your kiss. You rouse me from my deathlike slumber call to me, my spirit hovers. Shall I give my soul to you? Is loving you the thing to do? Swirls of gray and sparks of light compete for me, a bitter fight. You pull me close, then push away, how much exactly must I pay? Deep in my mind I see your hand stretch out to me across the land. Still cobwebs stick and cause confusion, are you nothing but illusion? Soon I think it will be clear, an answer that I have to hear. Storm ahead with clouds so dark, loving you has left a mark. Silver edge surrounds the clouds hope eternal, true love found? So well I've played this waiting game, I feel I may go quite insane. |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Simply Superb as always. I like the way you use nature to describe your emotions.  Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Cat,...This one just really speaks to me (as I know things hehee)...well, very well portrayed sort of hopes and doubts and all that's wrapped up in this sort of situation. I like the reference to the clouds,....a storm but also the silver lining....it's hard to tell what's ahead there, but you'll never know if you don't aim and head. Great writing you. Take care. *Peace. *If I talk too much just tell me to shut up  . [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 08-25-2000).] |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Great one, like it a lot |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
I forgot what it’s like to be sane, well whatever it was, I sure as hell don’t miss it. Insanity has this wonderful numbing effect, you should try it…but from the ending of your poem, you may be halfway there already. As love is a device of the sane, I’m afraid I cannot comment on that portion, but good writing, the insane can recognize, and this is some good writing… ---------------------- Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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LOTR Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 68New Jersey |
Once again you've come up with a beautiful work. I really love the way this one just floes so naturally. I think we all have played that waiting gam at one point. Richi Look back at your past, but don't stare too long.You might not like what you find |
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