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JSage
Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91
Nashua, NH USA

0 posted 2000-08-25 04:44 PM



Cut Me Down
by J.Sage (8/22/2000)
protected by copyright

Never did I face a wall of steel
Obstacles I could not move
Push
Push
You know I never would've lied to you
Anyway
The day we died
Was it Jesus
Was it Moses
God, I prayed
For  a resurrection
Instead
I got a crucifixion
Some days I did it to myself
Pain can be good
Not this…
This fallen building
This weak little structure
Was not made of steel
But you are
When you have your way
And I can't budge you
And I can't pray
Enough to bring it back
So I lay in debris
And I wait for something
Anything to happen
To cut me down
From the cross I bear
For you



© Copyright 2000 JSage - All Rights Reserved
poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
1 posted 2000-08-25 04:55 PM


**looks like im officially starting the fan club!**  

im assuming this poem is about a lover, but then again many of us often bear crosses for friends and family as well....if you have the strength to carry that cross...then you certainly have the strength to break free.
another great read!
~Dawn

whatcha doing in this darkness baby
when you know love will set you free?
will you stay in the sea forever
Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live

JSage
Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91
Nashua, NH USA
2 posted 2000-08-25 05:02 PM


thank you again, Dawn.  Yes, my only true love.  We are currently apart and may be forever... but he was and probably will be for a while my best muse.  He is my breathless beauty.  Unfortunately in the 3 years we were together, it is apparent to me now, that he has never learned to breathe.

-Jes

Deranger
Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
3 posted 2000-08-25 07:53 PM


Worry not about copyrights here, my dear.  Please leave the paranoia to the experts (me), though with a skill like yours, I can see why you want security.  Well, take peace in the fact its false security anyway, the worlds a big enough place that someone could get away with stealing your work…But enough of that depressing reality for now.  Back to mind-numbing delirium!  
Yes, you certainly have talent…this is one of the most…graphic pieces I’ve read (Especially the crucifixion part).  I applaud you and bid you welcome to this online mausoleum we call Dark Passions.  



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