Dark Poetry #2 |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
It waits in ambush Hidden, almost invisible, Along the seams, and crevices of enjoyment. There it waits, like a coiled viper, Ready to poison all who are careless enough to cross it's path. What once was vivacious, Now lies cold, and dead. A once bright, fruitful land, Now ravaged by ongoing, ruthless storms of ridicule, and scorn. It not only strips away all life from the now depleted body, But also isolates one even in a world of millions. It leaves men alone to face this endless nightmare alone. No one to comfort or support him, Only the inner demons that threaten, and cajole him, And drag his lost soul down a dank, endless pit of misery, and despair! < !signature--> -"!!!" [This message has been edited by !!! (edited 08-16-2000).] |
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eldridgejackson Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 91 |
The Lie I liked it James |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi !!!, I really like this poem, I know all to well the feels you are describing here (it) does not ever completely leave once (its) made (its) home. You have given (it) life in this poem (it) can kill the simplest of pleasures and even go farther by destroying anything left so you have given (IT) power and knowledge so why not simply call it (IT) but I have a hard time sometimes getting titles but the poem was awesome thanks. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
sometimes we know not what possesse's us and this is what I can see in this poem although we know something is lurking and taking ahold we have no choice but to give in. I would think A good title would be (The Danger within) |
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T.Rose Junior Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 20 |
OH, I like this... It reminds me of a word retirement. < !signature--> [This message has been edited by T.Rose (edited 08-18-2000).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
How about "plague". I really like this poem although it gave me the chills a bit. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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