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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
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0 posted 2000-08-13 04:29 PM


Sadly I'll Never Really Know

Ice cream kisses and words
about cow carcass shields,
stems failing in ache from
too many times up and down.
Those curtains and windows shine today,
I can see the ice cream in the reflection
and the scars like a photograph with medals.
So many lifetimes by and today
the wounds are fresh and breathing,
they take the air from my lungs to soothe.
Dear friends and waters blood red
and ice cream kisses and shaking
not in fear but years and ages,
but times ill and wet.
An offering today for my safety
in expressional terms of all I am,
a helmut signed in time and still,...
I have no idea.




[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 08-13-2000).]

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brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
1 posted 2000-08-13 05:32 PM


SpitFire, wow amazing imagery, surreal in parts and overall a powerful piece of writing this one has me floored. excellent piece.

"Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-08-13 06:04 PM


Its me, your number one fan! This is a little different than usual, and I like it a lot. The ending speaks to me particularly. I still have no idea..either.
Peace
Cat...

But words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling, like dew, upon a thought produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think.
Lord By

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2000-08-14 05:54 AM


I also have no idea. But vivid images. Very esoteric. :P
Be well
Keth

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

kynder
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since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
4 posted 2000-08-26 09:50 PM


this is very interesting, fire.  like a peek into your brain somehow.  very good!!!

kynder

Sunshine can not bleach
The snow,
Nor time unmake what
Poets know.

Ralph Waldo Emerson

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
5 posted 2000-08-26 10:04 PM


I have an idea!  BUT IT’S MINE, GET AWAY FROM IT!!!
Sorry, my friend Insanity wrote that.  Superb imagery, geez, I wish I had half your skill.  
“the wounds are fresh and breathing”  I like that line the best.



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Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
6 posted 2000-08-27 12:29 PM


Love ya kid, I'm at White doves PC working between both places.
Great poem, no idea myself just one day at a time.

HHHHHHOOOOOWWWWWWLLLLLMMMMIIIISSSSSSSYYYYOOOOUUUU

Joel (Your cyber dad) forever.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

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