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a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 392


0 posted 2000-08-11 12:10 PM



look inside
to what I hide
the world can not see
what dwells within insanity
Frozen
question what is real
inside a thousand red tears
flowing from within my fears
Frozen
clutching liquid webs
that are spun into my soul
as the blackness ebbs
Frozen
screaming silently
to gohsts that dance with deamons
swaying and drifting free
Frozen
escaping into my own insanity
into a mind no other can see
rest my world gently
Frozen


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

© Copyright 2000 a-alibaster (H.A.R.) - All Rights Reserved
Chained2illusions
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 45
Elyria, Oh *at the moment*
1 posted 2000-08-11 12:19 PM


I am breathless at this poem! You spark such emotion and I respect that so much.  Wonderful work!Thank you for sharing

Denise~

There is fire inside us all..it sparks with just the match.

a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

2 posted 2000-08-11 12:28 PM


Thank you so very much Chained!!
Believe it or not, once in a while I shock myself...I have gone back and read this 3 times now...sort of amazed myself.
I am glad that you enjoyed...was worried no one would understand...but you did and now I am content! Thank you once again.


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

Alicat
Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094
Coastal Texas
3 posted 2000-08-11 01:24 PM


Wonderful psychological piece!  I could hear the silent ravings of a stainless steel mind: nothing enters, nothing leaves.  Very good poem.

Only one flaw did I see:  you misspelled ghosts in the line 'to gohsts that dance with daemons'.

Alicat

a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

4 posted 2000-08-11 01:41 PM


Yes, Alicat, you saw it...I misspelled it....sorry!! got ahead of myself I guess.

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

Virgin Suïcide
Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
5 posted 2000-08-11 01:44 PM


wow.....it's just great, my compliments!
Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
6 posted 2000-08-11 01:45 PM


wow.....it's just great, my compliments!
CrEaTuRe
Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
7 posted 2000-08-11 02:13 PM


it's a wonderful piece of work with a deep meaning ..... btw your spelling was mixed-up (to gohsts that dance with deamons) ghosts is the one dearie  
 






Lil OnE
Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.
8 posted 2000-08-11 03:47 PM


I would do this poem no justice by saying anything but WOW. It was awe inspiring, and very deep. I loved it!!
darkstar
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
9 posted 2000-08-11 11:09 PM


I really liked it. Your imagery is really awesome.

Dark Star

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