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Laconic Farewell (from my archives) |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia 
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Poisoned was my claret of life Now I drink of Evermore. ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
That kicks! I've never seen two lines express that much! Great job! Really cool post! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Wren,thank you so much! its an oldy, but thought id give it a try here anyway! glad you liked it! whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Wow, interesting. This was a very original poem. Is this meant to express death, or the transition into a different stage of life? That is what I see in this work. |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
I have always liked brevity. One can speak volumes in very few words if done properly. You have definately done it properly here! Sing while you may -The Prophet Qa'sepel Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen -The Prophet Qa'sepel |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is simply amazing! I'm so glad you dug it up for us!  Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This is cool. How can two lines say so much? Be well Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
fractal007: thank you so much! and you were correct, its about death, but a welcomed death....its not meant to be sorrowful, rather meant to be liberating....thanks again for your reply! Ian:You are the best! thank you so much! Lotharingia: thank you for a very flattering reply.....you are all making me feel very good for blowing the dust of this old poem! Kethry: thank you! sometimes we hear more in whats unsaid..than we do in what is said. thanks again! whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Dawn, this is powerful. I wish I could hear more of it, because the words there are so perfect. Certainly does say what you mean in few words. Take care Catalinamoon |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
excellent work. there are no words..... kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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