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IN his eye's you could see the devil
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IN his eye's you could see the devil |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
He sold his soul to sin and his Heart to the reaper, the darkness In him just keeps getting deeper. In his eye's you could see the devil His soul darker then black earth, All through life he thought life As a curse, where theres nothing worse. In his eye's you could see the devil His heart dark as charcoal Throughout life he never was Whole so he just let the world go. In his eye's you could see the devil He was born dark lived dark, So through his life he let evil Embark with a very ungodly spark. In his eye's you could see the devil I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
I liked the flow of this one, and the way the rhymes staggered inside the lines occasionally. Nice, dark subject. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Well JJ I very much liked the first stanza, "He sold his soul to sin and his Heart to the reaper, the darkness In him just keeps getting deeper. In his eye's you could see the devil" I have sold mine the the reaper also. not much left of it. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
jj, all i can say is i hope this isn't you. sad soul indeed. God will give him a refund, no soul sale is final when sold to the devil. kynder A woman to a man is But a mere chapter, But a man to a woman Is an entire book.-- Kynder Howell |
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