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hunter Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 22lex,ky |
I am drowning in a sea of emotions and thoughts. What is real and what is not i can not tell. Everything is just swirling around, like a tornato ready to touch down. I feel lost and trapped, like my mind may snap. Where is the me, I thought myself to me. I saw a light shining, was to be my silver lining. I long for an outstreched hand, to make me feel more human. But i see that will never be. I am doomed to be...... just me. |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
What a great poem!  I particularly like your reference to the tornado - it puts that image immediately into mind! I look forward to reading more of your poetry |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I love your imagery. You know what's funny? The people you would rather be more like have that exact same longing at times. We are the hollow men We are the stuffed men Leaning together Headpiece filled with straw. Alas! Our dried voices, when We whisper together Are quiet and meaningless As wind in dry grass Or rats' feet over broken glass In our dry cellar Shape without form, shade without color, Paralyzed force, gesture without motion; --T.S. Eliot |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I'm not the official Greater, but Welcome to Dark Passions, my friend. this is a great start here. drowning in a sea of emotions we can all understand, and trying to reach an unreachable light that might bring us out of our ?? drowning, is also something we can all understand, you have hit many points here, we see clearly, But not doomed to be just you, that can be a wonderful experience in life, it is what you make of it, it's not in the attaining the light, but in the reaching for. this is a wonderful poem. Light and love my friend. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
first of all welcome to passions. this is a great poem and a great start for you here. and i would like to read more of you and yes would you mined if i was to tell people to read this poem? I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Good read, well put. I know this feeling all to well. Welcome, and thanks for sharing. Click |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Welcome here!!! This poem is so very full of feeling. You have described this feeling so right on. Well written,...had me the whole time. You are you and what you make you. (that make any sense)? hehe. Seriously though,...hang in there. *Peace. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Firstly welcome!! You described your feelings wonderfully here, but I will add doomed to be just me, is NOT a sentence, YOU and only YOU have the power to make yourself and your life whatever you want them to be. If you sit back and don't fight for your dreams etc, you will indeed be doomed to a life of nothing much, but if you fight your life can be wonderful and anything you want! Movie quote from 'Steel Magnolias' - "I'd rather have three minutes of wonderful than a lifetime of nothing special!!" Great work  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Words that I have attempted to say so many times but could not.... I love this...well written. There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul... a-alibaster |
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hunter Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 22lex,ky |
thank you all for reading my words and the kind words you've given me in return.please share these with others if you would like to jeremiah or anyone else.thank you all for the warm welcome also.light andlove to all. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Okay so I am a lil late on this welcome package for you. But "Welcome!!!!" This was an excellent piece of work going on here. I can totally go into ur deepest soul with this one. I hope to see ALOT more. Peace I do not love you for being perfect..... I love you for being perfect for me!! |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Welecome to Passions. I enjoyed this piece. So full of emotion. Looking forward to reading more kitkat |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
So full of emotion....I like it!! I also hope to see more!!  Welcome to Passions!! Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
this is sooooo very good. extremely raw and exposing. to accept ones self, and realize that is all you are... rather double edged, is it not? be proud or be disappointed... the battle wages on. kynder A woman to a man is But a mere chapter, But a man to a woman Is an entire book.-- Kynder Howell |
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