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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road 
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travelling unexpected to the lands of twilight through the door we walk to the other world deep green the dark and mantle of the king darkly spiraling gaunt the grey of crag wild rain sweeps cliffs plumed bright eyes travelling on this train of lies seeking light or at least a star in foggy day we sleep for a million years between mosses our mind in questioning across the veil of mist within in the goddess hand content knowing our hypnosis is real finding then a nestling place deep inside the shaking tree through many nights waiting rain crashing rivulets to streams to rivers to sea now the aching need full bright opal in the moons pale face rising to fly swift as the wind to meet the silver fleece of old and the always darkness waiting |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Allan, where have you been, Ive missed your work!! This was full of colors and images, awesome poem!! I read it twice, I enjoyed it so much!! Booo..no place to vote?? Hope to see more soon!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
travelling on this train of lies I hate those trains don't you...how about traveling by plane..or boat..would that work.. *teasin' you...what does the title mean..if I amay ask? ~~soft smiles Allan Maureen |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Alan, that is an awesome writing, I love the way it carries you along, just like a waterfall, sliding down the poem.Very impressive. Catalinamoon |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Allan, How do you do this? You have made words your slaves, you bend them to your will. This poem is so fantastic, I have it earmarked as one of my favs! You take us on an undulating journey through time and space, through the unconscious and the conscious, dream and reality. It reminded me of Dylan Thomas. BTW, were you referring to clouds in the title? BTW, Deb, if I might be so forward as to answer for allan, he hasn’t been anywhere, you just have to “migrate” to corner pub and open to read his wonderful poetry, there are also some real gems in the crit archives.  Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Allan, I've never seen your work before and I already love it. I agree with Cat, it's like a waterfall carrying you away on the words and I wish I'd brought my life-jacket. lol. Seriously though excellent stuff. Be well Kethry. "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Great work! Wonderous images.... Quite lovely! Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
I'm afraid I was in the deepest slough of despond when I penned this last night... The title doesn't mean anythina (as far as my conscious mind knows!)  (But I do see Uta the cloud connection - maybe...)  |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is irrelevant, but this poem deserves more comments. Cirrus, pl: cirri, a thin, whispy, fibrous cloud composed of ice particles and found at hight altitiudes, etc (too lazy to type the rest  )Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Very good work in this poem. It is a really interesting one. Lots of good imagery. |
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