Dark Poetry #2 |
In Time Of Yesterdays |
SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
In Time Of Yesterdays calls of clinking jewelry down halls dark as mud wet with fear with race with her in steps of twenty with leaps of few stretch of skin in tries the shivering sounds of breath being stolen of feet being worn by the flee for the door for the slide of now in time of yesterdays. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Spitfire, my heart was pumping and my palms sweaty while reading this poem. VEry intense. You have me wondering what we are running from though, it seems like the past but that always catches up in the end. I am going to take a rest, I am not as fit as I would like to be. LOL. Great poem, "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
My friend, your work continues to challenge and fasinate me. This one has left me breathless! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Whew, very good, as usual. Does give you that frantic kind of feeling. cat... |
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BigPimpinSk8tr Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 17Chambersburg, PA, USA |
Superb! I've seen alot of different styles of poems and i've read alot of stuf, but that was intense. In light of this, i must say i am mighty flattered that you thought good of my work. I mean, a compliment from such an exquisite poet... i look forward to reading more of your work... " If what i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am i?" - unknown |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Spitfire, I know Ive said this before, but the anticipation of what Im going to read..you never let me down!! This one left me tired..LOL Another great one!!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
So good this is! Had me thinking of someone running away from the past, or life, or themselves. As always I am flabbergasted! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Great poem. It left me breathless. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
SF...I had a differing perspective. I saw it as an old woman, in a nursing home perhaps...shuffling along the halls, her arm bracelets clinking..making for the door, and waiting for death....but, that's just me. Hardrock |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
WOW!! Great one Spitfire! Left me speechless! DkW Once there was a darkness Deep and endless night You gave me everything you had Ahhhhhh you gave me light |
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