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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396


0 posted 2000-08-05 04:08 PM


In Time Of Yesterdays

calls of
clinking
jewelry
down halls
dark as
mud wet
with fear
with race
with her
in steps
of twenty
with leaps
of few
stretch of
skin in
tries the
shivering
sounds
of breath
being
stolen
of feet
being
worn
by the
flee for
the door
for the
slide of
now in
time of
yesterdays.


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brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
1 posted 2000-08-05 04:48 PM


Spitfire, my heart was pumping and my palms sweaty while reading this poem. VEry intense. You have me wondering what we are running from though, it seems like the past but that always catches up in the end. I am going to take a rest, I am not as fit as I would like to be. LOL. Great poem,  

"I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone"
manic street preachers

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
2 posted 2000-08-05 05:57 PM


My friend, your work continues to challenge and fasinate me. This one has left me breathless!

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-08-05 06:10 PM


Whew, very good, as usual. Does give you that frantic kind of feeling.
cat...

BigPimpinSk8tr
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 17
Chambersburg, PA, USA
4 posted 2000-08-05 06:17 PM


Superb!  I've seen alot of different styles of poems and i've read alot of stuf, but that was intense.  In light of this, i must say i am mighty flattered that you thought good of my work.  I mean, a compliment from such an exquisite poet... i look forward to reading more of your work...

" If what i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am i?" - unknown

Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
5 posted 2000-08-05 08:45 PM


Spitfire, I know Ive said this before, but the anticipation of what Im going to read..you never let me down!! This one left me tired..LOL Another great one!!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
6 posted 2000-08-06 05:27 AM


FIRE!

So good this is!
Had me thinking of someone running away from the past, or life, or themselves.
As always I am flabbergasted!

      


Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
7 posted 2000-08-06 05:33 AM


Great poem. It left me breathless.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole

Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
8 posted 2000-08-07 10:40 PM


SF...I had a differing perspective.  I saw it as an old woman, in a nursing home perhaps...shuffling along the halls, her arm bracelets clinking..making for the door, and waiting for death....but, that's just me.  Hardrock
Dark_kisses_Within
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since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
9 posted 2000-08-08 11:31 AM


WOW!!  Great one Spitfire!  Left me speechless!  

DkW


Once there was a darkness
Deep and endless night
You gave me everything you had
Ahhhhhh you gave me light


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