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Dance of terror |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) 
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Window panes come crashing down < !signature-->Amidst the tears and pain Vanishing hopes are gone and flew away Up above through twilight Shadows cast across the floor Reflections of the past Trembling thoughts of one Dwelling deep within the soul A mystical sense of reality Captured by the craze All in bewilderment Of the shock in the wave Creatures of the dimness Chattering amongst the green Everything slows in stillness What is this we see???? "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown [This message has been edited by Justbleu (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~JustBleu,...this is a most chilling piece. I am not sure what you intended to portray, but I have an image,...a little scene here in my head produced from your poetic words...that sit me right in my own room....feeling this way. What I have taken from this,..I have felt more than once. Very nicely done. Take care. *Peace. |
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E. Benjamin Roy Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 12 |
A nightmareish tale you tell...I love it |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
OMG this sounds like the eye of a Twister, or an internal turmoil. no matter, I got what I wanted from it. and that was good. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i have felt this piece in my heart and it gave me a sad little joy how ever that me sound it was a great piece from you. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I'm with Joel on this one. sounds like sounds like the eye of a Twister to me. great writing ! |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
Creepy, yet intriguing. Both are why I enjoyed it. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Wow I didn't know I'd get such positive response!! I'm glad you like it!!!! This is one of my favorites and newest pieces!! Thank You sooo much!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I am interested in seeing what other things poeple think this may be!!!! For I am not even sure!!!! The eye of a twister is a good one!!! This one is a bit different from my usual writing but my last few pieces have been strange to me!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A mystical sense of reality Captured by the craze All in bewilderment Of the shock in the wave Creatures of the dimness Chattering amongst the green Everything slows in stillness very intense poem. agony at its most extreme. wow... A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
 Brian Thank You!! INTENSE is good!! "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JustBleu~ Just bopping around .... this is pretty good .... I prefer your romanticizing tales but believe in diversity. You veered with this one - way to go ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Thank You Marge!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This gives me a sense of internal turmoil, despair, a whirlwind of emotion, searching for some direction. Great writing! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Eagle One you really pick up on things....very insightful you are!!!! Thank You for telling me!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
JustBleu, U definitely have my vote on this one! Amazing work ... verve~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
How did I miss this before?? This is great, I feel the lost hope, maybe thinking of a past love, and knowing it cannot be. I have a problem with relating everyones poems to my own life though, so you may mean something else. Either way, it was an excellent poem, and I like this style as well as your others. "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Bridgette...I too missed this one somehow....but I'm glad I found it. To me, it was "soup"...you put in all the ingredients and out came poetic food for the soul. Loved it....Hardrock |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Very good! Great! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Magebeast Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60 |
Wow....just wow. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I really enjoyed writing this one.....it was a pleasant surprise...this picture it created in my mind!!! Thanks to everyone!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Shh...just bumping this up!! Cuz, I wanted to share this with more people!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
Definitely a storm of turmoil here. Great work...I'm checking for some of your other work. Linda |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Thanks Linda for the comments!!! "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Justbleu, This reminds me of a rip, Crashing on rocks, dragging down, struggling for air, returning to the place of injury. Well done. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Hey Kethry!! Cool interpretation.... Thanks Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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