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SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2000-08-03 05:21 PM

In Hours Of Soaking You In

fair skin
soaking in
puddles of
you puddles
of the
hours and
the rides
of the
changing
of your
lies

accepting life
in style
of you
shall any
sugar rains
play shall
any shadow
run

breathing in
gusts of
you of
death in
dreams of
oil smeared
smiles

eyes believing
in words
of fire
in the
voice of
tangerine times
slipping so
full of
you

your lyrics
have held
you to
me for
decades of
space wasted
in hours
of soaking
you in.

misscris
Junior Member

since 2000-07-17

Posts 27
Leawood, KS, USA

1 posted 2000-08-03 05:25 PM

Vivid imagery and powerful words. Well done, I look forward to perusing through more of your posts.
misscris

'All the while thou studiest revenge, thou art tearing thine own wound open.
--thomas fuller

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

2 posted 2000-08-03 05:27 PM

WOW Spit fire a wonderful piece....amazing imagery definitely a porch poem. again amazing poem very cool.

breathing in
gusts of
you of
death in
dreams of
oil smeared
smiles

"I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone"
manic street preachers

EWDrake
Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 183
NC, USA

3 posted 2000-08-03 06:07 PM

Nice easy read, but by no means simple. Melodic and intriguing... Looking for more of yours to read. *S*

With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out.
~EWD~

L Tiuch
Member

since 2000-02-04

Posts 151
NY

4 posted 2000-08-03 06:12 PM

Beautifully done. The images you portray remind me of me...always the "drinker", never the "drinkee". Would be nice. Great job. Linda

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

5 posted 2000-08-03 07:04 PM

This is cool!

shall any
sugar rains
play shall
any shadow
run

And I definitely loved the way you formed the stanzas into little drops! Definitely fit the "water" theme!

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

6 posted 2000-08-03 09:54 PM

Well of course I love it! The last stanza I think was my favorite. Very lyrical and intriguing.
Cat..

sash
Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 125

7 posted 2000-08-03 11:53 PM

A cool drink of water with a tinge of regret...Reaaly liked this!

~Sash~

poutprincess
Senior Member

since 2000-07-06

Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia

8 posted 2000-08-04 09:19 AM

"eyes believing
in words
of fire
in the
voice of
tangerine times
slipping so
full of
you"

a very vivid consuming poem! very much enjoyed!

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

9 posted 2000-08-04 10:35 AM

Alicia..So many lines, so little time. You hook me with every poem. Your use of words, color, imagery. Terrific!! Hardrock

lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

10 posted 2000-08-04 11:58 AM

Fire, so wonderful this. I don't know how many times I came back to it, to soak it in again.

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

11 posted 2000-08-04 02:20 PM

A wonderful sensory feeling poem...really enjoyed it..thank you.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

12 posted 2000-08-05 08:22 AM

Alicia, spitfire, what can I say, as usual terrific. Lovely imagery.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

13 posted 2000-08-05 08:38 AM

Spitfire!! You have done it again, another teriffic poem!! I think its all been said, the imagery, all of it.. Im going back to read it again!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

BigPimpinSk8tr
Junior Member

since 2000-08-05

Posts 17
Chambersburg, PA, USA

14 posted 2000-08-05 06:25 PM

umm..Wow. Very powerful imgaery. Such a wonderful use of the words. Your work is really impressive, i'm sitting in anticipation for the next one...

" If what i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am i?" - unknown

insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

15 posted 2000-08-12 12:38 PM

A wet one from hot one
A hot wet one

Think I'll have a beer!

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