Dark Poetry #2 |
Twisted Musings (written with DeathTrippy) |
poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i was given a great honour to work with a very talented poet..DeathTrippy did a sensational job as Dark...i do applaude him! The Twisted Musings of Dark vs. Light (Light) I am the sun, shine my majestic light That seduces the Earth to blossom I become natures only longing plight Which is to suckle the radiance of my bosom (Dark) I am Dark, cowards fall before Casting fear o're the flowers I will be their beauty slayer Earth wilts under my darkness (Light) Oh darkness my friend, just bow to defeat And swallow the bitter taste of your whim For I melt hearts with blistering heat And make man's blood boil mad with passion (Dark) I have no friend, save grim death Thou art a foe I chase till doom And lead away boiling blood To my bed of dark poisoning sin (Light) Then enemies we are, I'll give you that right Oh and I'd be jealous if I were you too Even in night the moon whispers my light And the stars twinkle beyond your dark hue (Dark) Stars are not yours, I fight them as well They fight their battle o're other worlds Worlds half darkened, driven mad by my might As is the moon,dead,only reflecting your dying light (Light) Your darkness may infest all thats weak It may suffocate fantasies untold But i am the force that gives courage to the meek I am the fire that ignites their soul (Dark) The weak for now, the best for later Your light will fail, your fire extinguish Your courage only temporary, lasting only in light For fear shall claim them when comes my black knight (Light) Do you truly think in your faltering wisdom/pride That you alone can destroy and displease? For I burn brightly and dry out the skies The dehydrated Earth left to die in disease (Dark) And thus you admit I command you, "Great Sun" You burn and destroy, serving my cause Preparing a half dead world to find its grave Now bow to the master who leads you in fault (Mediator) On that fateful day Sun understood Dark And realized the err of his ways He retired to the sunset, its beauty so stark Where the horizon paints the night from the day So whether you find solace or horror in night Or you find wrath in the warmth of the Sun We cannot exist without darkness and light For in reality they truly are One. |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Oh, you two are a pair....You did a fantastic job on this...a question...Why isnt it in open poetry #9...It would get much more appreciation and seen by many others..Im still babbling..This was unreal..You have to pair up again. The result is absolutely brilliant~ |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
What a team!!! I could feel each one taking their stance..Back and forth, feeling each ones defenses..this was exceptional!!! Hope to see more.Just loved it!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes, PP and DT awesome, just incredible. Great idea and great writing. Catalianmoon< !signature--> Practice can make anything perfect...even grief can become an art. Merrit Malloy [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
PP and DT. Great writing is all I can say and well balanced. Keth Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
To be honest, I was not sure I would like this..but, surprise, I did. Great back and forth. Hardrock |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Beth: thank you for always being there to support me! im very pleased you enjoyed this! Deborah1:loved that compliment! thank you very much! catalinamoon: Thank you so much for your fantastic response! Lynne Dale: thank you for taking the time to read, and especially thank you for your kind response! Hardrock: DeathTrippy and i have incredibly different styles, but i knew somehow we could create a bit of fire together! im so glad you were pleasantly suprised! Again, thank you all, We both do appreciate it! |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Innovation isn't exactly what i had expected, but i was nice surprise...and you know what they say: oppostite's attract... Great poem you two, hope to see some more coopertive works. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
AN excellent collaboration, wonderful poem beautifully written. GReat team effort DEathtrippy and Pout. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
This was awesome...I enjoyed the "joust" very much. Will be looking for more. Linda |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Deranger: oh wonderful..another one who was pleasantly suprised! thank you very much for stopping in and enjoying! brian: thank you! i had fun working with DeathTrippy on this...every little comeback he came out with had me rolling! LOL Linda: thank you as well! i will be certain to be on the lookout for your poetry too! you are appreciated! |
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DeathTrippy Junior Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 45WY USA |
thought I'd surprise everybody and thank you all for your support. It was actually fun writting this.. something I don't have much of. |
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