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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
I unfurl the wire as I go One foot and then the other It's a wobbly way of life I know But I haven't found another And if it breaks and if I fall I will recover the next day But if my feelings are punctured And drain from my wounds Then that's where I will lay Until she stands me on my feet With that sweetness scoop of hers And at the horizon is where we'll meet Parallel the four And then gravity will reverse For us for evermore |
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MiseryDivine Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh) |
hey there!....i like your poem, i do...tis very interestingly kewlz! good job! much love~ MiSeRyDivine~~ Wrath is glowing now through my sunken eyes.. Pain is growing I'm jaded form your lies I dont know why but its the best way to die You are the trig |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
You have a very good grasp of metre and rhyme. I am impressed. I liked the imagery also. Welcome and nice work. Sing while you may -The Prophet Q'spel Your pain is for you alone As it is As it was As it will be forever Amen -The Prophet Q'spel |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
great poem! i agree with the others....a job very well done |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Welcome to Dark Passions!  Great first post you have here. Keep up the wonderful work.Peace DkW Once there was a darkness Deep and endless night You gave me everything you had Ahhhhhh you gave me light |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
This poem has a nice feel to it. welcome to Passions. Keep on writing. Be well. Keth. Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Welcome to Passions! Just out of curiousity..cause I'm nosey... what's the signifigance of the line: Parallel the four ??? |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
Thanks everyone for your encouraging comments. I wrote "Parallel the four" to mean four feet walking the same path, but it can also mean four eyes with the same goal, or anything else you want. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Subjective exposure is true power of poetry, its meaning is dynamic for every reader, sure there are always similar feelings, but these are often stressed by the poet. Poetry means everything and anything. Uh, sorry, I have become possessed by some damn philosophical demon of late that has had me writing long, pointless replies about life in general whilst blatantly ignoring the poem at hand… First thing I like is the symbolism you used, its true, we’re all walking a tightrope through life. It’s a slow and often painful progression. ---------------------- Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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