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Almost Tears |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA 
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Almost Tears Feed the cat, walk the dog, get the mail. Write the cheque, sign on the line. Death with dignity allowed a final caress. Play dough, tinker toys, Lincoln logs. Tools for rebuilding at my fingertips. Patience, understanding, desire to forgive. Thought salad, tossed aside, as reality reaches in touching hair on a pillow never thought to grace again. Warm skin, sad eyes, quiver of lip, as we taste morning cooling in the sun. Finding the end to let it to go; saying good-bye as we said hello. But at least now both know, almost tears on a dry face say it best. With a warm touch laying to rest indecision and doubt from the mind. Streaks of white in Carolina Blue. Clouded eyes in the haze above watch my every languid move. Silly putty replicates, gentled souls know better. EWDrake © 2000 |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Evan, that is just beautiful, words, thoughts, touching, perfect."thought salad, tossed aside" How incredibly creative. cat... Practice can make anything perfect...even grief can become an art. Merrit Malloy |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Thank you Cat, I'm learning all over again...the encouragement is gratifying... Take care, Evan |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Good job! What a complex poem, The words painted such a picture in my mind! Wow! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Kind words, Wren...  Thank you, Evan |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Evan I agree, this was filled with so much, and I enjoyed it very much!! Hope to see more, just loved it!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~WoW. Your words put so many different images and thoughts into my head. I am especially diggin' these here lines...."Finding the end to let it to go; saying good-bye as we said hello."....although the entire poem was written so well. BTW,...I have always loved the name Evan. It's really nice. Be well E. *Peace. *Almost Tears,...how cool is that? So Cool. Love the title. |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Deborah, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Take care, m'lady, Evan |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
I thought your poem was very creative and i really enjoyed it. "almost tears on a dry face say it best"- I loved that line --Gin "There is no always forever-just this-R.Smith broken glass never cuts the way it should-Gin |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
SpitFire, you make me smile.... Thank you for the vote of confidence. Take Care, Evan |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Ginners, I see you're new here as well, welcome. Thanks fow the kind response. Evan |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
i love the play on words.....its a little confusing but i thiunk i get it i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
I'm sorry, M'lady, I did not intend for it to be confusing. I'm pleased you liked it nonetheless... Thank you, Evan |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
But at least now both know, almost tears on a dry face say it best once again you turn a heart....I love your mind.. ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Evan, this is gorgeous. And ya gotta love that Carolina blue (woohooo go NC). Now back to the poem, hehe. I couldn't believe how creative it was. Awesome job my poetic friend. Juls |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Thank you , Maureen, and my mind adores yours as well! *S* Evan |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Ahhhhhh.....Juls, you know the Tar Heels!!! My kinda woman!! Thanks for reading and responding. Evan With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out. ~EWD~ |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Evan..this is simply awesome!! Have you met my good friend, Rex Alford? I tried to pick out a line to comment on...but it would be akin to picking a rose from the lovliest garden: They are all just too beautiful. The reference to Carolina Blue caught me by surprise...I'm a Tarheel. Hardrock |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Simply wonderful, I ditto all of the above. I enjoyed it all so much, can't just pick out one line... wonderful work hon.. a terrific journey for us all!! I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Hardrock, Hey, another Carolina Boy!, Nice to meet you, Sir. I'm glad you enjoyed the verse. Thank you for the glowing response. Evan Drake With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out. ~EWD~ |
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